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by BlancheKing
June 6th, 2010, 11:31 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First Page YA: opinions on voice and technique appreciated
Replies: 30
Views: 5769

Re: First Page YA: opinions on voice and technique appreciated

Hmm.. watch the sentence lengths. We are simple people. We think in short sentences, and action. There is too much description, and too much drama for a scene where technically: nothing extraordinary happens.
by BlancheKing
June 5th, 2010, 10:12 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - Under The Sun
Replies: 4
Views: 1388

Re: Synopsis - Under The Sun

Just a few thoughts... please excuse the bluntness UNDER THE SUN - SYNOPSIS A fast paced romance drama, which revolves around Evelyn Carter and Christopher Hayden. Too many unnecessary words and overly complex structure; the point of a synopsis is to be brief. Replace "which revolves around" with "i...
by BlancheKing
June 4th, 2010, 5:34 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writing yourself into a corner...
Replies: 27
Views: 4666

Re: Writing yourself into a corner...

Haha. I'm suddenly inspired to use a plot wheel... go!
by BlancheKing
June 4th, 2010, 5:32 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 97344

Re: Rejection Stats

Updated - and confused?? Genre: YA Mystery Total queries sent to date: 35 Queries still awaiting response: 13? Rejections to date: 13 Form rejections: 13 Personalized rejections: 0 Request for partials: 5 Request for fulls: 4 (one of them came back in a rush I think. They form copied a manuscript re...
by BlancheKing
June 1st, 2010, 4:08 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writing yourself into a corner...
Replies: 27
Views: 4666

Re: Writing yourself into a corner...

Is it sad then that I already have an outline? I tried taking this one author's advice: know some of the beginning, some of the middle, and all of the end. The problem is that the middle got lost in a stream of events that are only important later. It's like chauffeuring a friend to the airport. Whe...
by BlancheKing
June 1st, 2010, 4:04 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Excerpt that is sort of a short story...
Replies: 5
Views: 1024

Re: Excerpt that is sort of a short story...

I liked it until it got here... "The green grasses of Virginia soothed my nerves much more than the grayish snow of New York where I played out the first eighteen years of my life. City lights at night refused to reveal the white dot stars as buses and taxis crawled past my window each day, splashin...
by BlancheKing
June 1st, 2010, 1:06 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writing yourself into a corner...
Replies: 27
Views: 4666

Writing yourself into a corner...

I hate this, but bloody hell, it seems to happen all the time... So I'm working on my second novel and am absolutely loving the new characters (particularly one) but every time I want him to show a little bit more of himself, I end up writing him into a predicament where I have no idea what to do wi...
by BlancheKing
May 31st, 2010, 4:05 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: A forum game: three word story
Replies: 83
Views: 11271

Re: A forum game: three word story

Once upon a horse Sonja feared the darkness across the river might be too deep. Sighing, she turned and found a block of cheese made of Venusian so she picked up a sword to pierce into the looming thicket. "No!" said the block of cheese! "Don't go there!" But the cheese did not know how to talk let ...
by BlancheKing
May 29th, 2010, 10:16 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Okay, be honest…how crappy is your first draft?
Replies: 41
Views: 13122

Re: Okay, be honest…how crappy is your first draft?

Mine was okay actually. The writing wasn't terrible; it was just incredibly short first draft with limited details. I didn't describe anything until the 2nd draft.

First draft: 30k
Second: 54k
Third: 77k
Fourth: 89k
Fifth: 82k
... and it keeps going. I think I'm on draft 11 right now
by BlancheKing
May 28th, 2010, 3:43 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Long Abandoned Projects Suddenly Seem Interesting?
Replies: 4
Views: 1049

Long Abandoned Projects Suddenly Seem Interesting?

Anyone else experiencing this situation? My computer charger picked today of all days to snap in two, so the partial I was suppose to send out today got delayed (as my own laptop can't turn on until my rush-delivery charger shows up tomorrow). Instead, I read through my old notebooks of past project...
by BlancheKing
May 27th, 2010, 3:33 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: So I want to self publish... kinda sorta, not really
Replies: 17
Views: 3600

Re: So I want to self publish... kinda sorta, not really

It doesn't sound too bad... though from the sounds of it, you've got a request for 20 something copies. What are you going to do with the other 80? Why not go to Kinko's or something and make 1 copy for your wife? The only other case I've personally seen of self publishing was by a friend of my RA. ...
by BlancheKing
May 18th, 2010, 12:30 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Ups and Downs
Replies: 9
Views: 1624

Re: Ups and Downs

Also hanging on the edges. Got my 9th reply finally. Also got a full and partial still out there. It's been over a month for the partial, and about two weeks for the full. I'm debating whether or not to work on my other manuscript, and fighting the urge to send 10 more queries out just so I'd have s...
by BlancheKing
May 15th, 2010, 12:09 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Words I Can't Stop Using
Replies: 30
Views: 5621

Re: Words I Can't Stop Using

Thank you nomad =) that's very helpful
by BlancheKing
May 15th, 2010, 12:07 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: How long is too long before sending out a partial or full?
Replies: 55
Views: 7489

Re: How long is too long before sending out a partial or full?

Command was not my intention; colloquialism was. But if it offends you, I apologize.
by BlancheKing
May 14th, 2010, 8:18 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 97344

Re: Rejection Stats

2:8 ratio. You're doing well =) Congrats