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by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: New Query Writing Method
Replies: 3
Views: 1057

Re: New Query Writing Method

I like the Mad Lib book idea! You can create one then market it to writers. :P
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: WIL DRAKE AND THE WITCHES OF THE WATER
Replies: 8
Views: 1361

Re: Query: WIL DRAKE AND THE WITCHES OF THE WATER

I think aj's restructuring of your conflict is spot on. From what I've read--I might be wrong--you don't want to have a paragraph of past tense explanation. Agents like to see queries in present tense. I could be wrong though. Good luck!
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:43 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Invisible
Replies: 5
Views: 818

Re: Query: Invisible

I would add to what aj said--no need to tell the agent that the novel touches on relevant issues like bullying and the like. Let the query speak for itself by SHOWING the agent how your novel addresses this. I really like the idea of invisibility though! Queries are tough and I am by no means an aut...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Earth to Sirius
Replies: 6
Views: 1006

Re: Earth to Sirius

I think glj is right on the money with comments. That being said, I believe this to be a very interesting take on a concept that's been driven into the ground. It could make for some VERY interested agents once you nail down the query!
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEMOIRS OF DANIEL: THE FALLEN (Fantasy)
Replies: 6
Views: 1357

Re: MEMOIRS OF DANIEL: THE FALLEN (Fantasy)

The only thing I would worry about is the fact that part of your title is The Fallen (like Fallen by Lauren Kate) and a main character is named Daniel (I believe this is the main angel in Fallen but I could be mistaken). Since it is on a similar topic, IMO, you may want to either change the title or...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: CLASS (Literary fiction, maybe?)
Replies: 8
Views: 1266

Re: Query: CLASS (Literary fiction, maybe?)

I think you should focus mainly on one character. It sounds like Garcia is the your focal point and Danny is the vehicle that helps drive the story. Once you choose one character to talk about then it will flow better, IMO. I think you don't need the mention of Danny in the first paragraph after the...
by allegedauthor
January 5th, 2011, 8:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2366

Re: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

I would agree on the first two sentences not gelling with the first paragraph. HOWEVER, I think they inserted some much need voice into the query. I like your last attempt much better. You're getting there and it sounds like an interesting story!