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by D.T.Roberts
October 15th, 2010, 2:00 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 41343

Re: Share your opening sentence!

The call came at 7:32. Alex couldn’t believe the timing. Tonight of all nights. Carmen has been waiting for this moment for months. It was her first high school prom. Tonight was finally here. Her dress was beautiful, a burgundy satin affair that was off the shoulders and just touching the floor. He...
by D.T.Roberts
October 14th, 2010, 9:27 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Dialog critique please
Replies: 7
Views: 1866

Re: Dialog critique please

Thanks to all.
This is my 1st attempt. I have much to learn.
by D.T.Roberts
October 8th, 2010, 12:20 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: First, second and third person p.o.v
Replies: 33
Views: 5160

Re: First, second and third person p.o.v

The thing to keep in mind is that if you write in first person, that person must be present in every scene, otherwise he/she would not be aware of what else is going on in the story therefor would have no first hand knowlege of it. The narator as first person may be an outside observer of events but...
by D.T.Roberts
October 8th, 2010, 11:54 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Dramatica theory
Replies: 1
Views: 452

Dramatica theory

Does anyone use the Dramatica theory and if so, do you struggle with the complexity of deciding on character elements that put them at oposition with thier counter parts? For example The REASON character and the EMOTION character.
by D.T.Roberts
October 2nd, 2010, 8:12 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: S.A.N.E. plot outline.
Replies: 1
Views: 877

S.A.N.E. plot outline.

For most of her life, Janet Freeman has suffered at the hands of people who were supposed to protect her. Now, as a sexual assault nurse examiner, she does her part to make her city and the world, for that matter, a safer place. But when a rapist commits a series of brutal assaults, Janet uses her p...
by D.T.Roberts
October 1st, 2010, 10:41 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: How many clients books have you sold to publishers?
Replies: 1
Views: 948

How many clients books have you sold to publishers?

As an agent, how many client's books have you sold?
by D.T.Roberts
October 1st, 2010, 2:24 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Dialog critique please
Replies: 7
Views: 1866

Re: Dialog critique please

Thanks, I appreciate the suggestions. This is a first draft but I do need to let the individual personalities show more thru dialog... I guess this is where more indepth character developement comes into play. Also, I've noticed that many best selling authors give much of the background of character...
by D.T.Roberts
October 1st, 2010, 1:27 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 618
Views: 193707

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hi All My name is Dale. I'm new here as well. I love the idea of interacting with other aspiring writers. I love legal dramas, but, with the popularity of forensics shows on TV, I thought a novel that combined both could have good commercial potential. I am presently working on my first novel called...
by D.T.Roberts
October 1st, 2010, 12:58 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Dialog critique please
Replies: 7
Views: 1866

Dialog critique please

Dialog critique please. This is an exerpt from chapter three. To set the scene, there has been a security breach involving confidential finacial information on some very wealthy, powerful people who have purchased expensive new cars from a local Lexus/Mercedes Benz dealership. The FBI has sent Speci...
by D.T.Roberts
October 1st, 2010, 12:02 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First page of YA novel, Jasmine Powers, Super Geek
Replies: 7
Views: 2422

Re: First page of YA novel, Jasmine Powers, Super Geek

A very good start. I agree with Mark. The itailics seem to distract. Good use of dialog. It shows the interaction between characters without to many narative discriptions. I can see the beginnings of conflict. A paper that will be difficult to research and one she really doesn't want to write. Maybe...