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by androidblues
October 1st, 2010, 6:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Summertime Query
Replies: 28
Views: 3666

Re: Summertime Query

Definitely kiddy screwball comedy. Thanks for the advice, I'll be sure to integrate it tonight.
by androidblues
October 1st, 2010, 12:46 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 95979

Re: Rejection Stats

Genre: YA Total queries sent to date: 8 Queries still awaiting a response: 3 Rejections to date: 5 Form rejections: 4 Personalized rejections: 1 Requests for pages: 0 Requests for manuscript: 0 Of course my query sucked and there wasn't really a plot so I don't blame them. It was a Love, Stargirl li...
by androidblues
October 1st, 2010, 12:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Summertime Query
Replies: 28
Views: 3666

Re: Summertime Query

Thanks for the help. Here's a revised version. Ten-year-old Summer Thomas is mature beyond her years. Unfortunately no one ever takes her seriously. That is except for Zach, her sister's best friend. Zach treats her like an equal, instead of like a child, and doesn't tell her to butt out of adult co...
by androidblues
October 1st, 2010, 11:26 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Figment - YA Fantasy- REVISED
Replies: 10
Views: 1979

Re: Query - Figment - YA Fantasy- REVISED

This sounds pretty interesting, but I agree you need to explain why the Council is so important. I need something to make me feel why George has to protect Audrey so much. Like in the Hunger Games it was survive or die. What threat does the council pose and why should I care?
by androidblues
October 1st, 2010, 11:15 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Whip-Slip query
Replies: 68
Views: 8557

Re: The Whip-Slip query

Quill wrote:Another reason they are easily mixed up is that neither is instantly recognizable as male or female. Thea is like Theo and Tully could be female or male, so we don't have clear gender markers, besides the similarity in first letter and word length.
This is exactly what I meant.
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 7:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Summertime Query
Replies: 28
Views: 3666

Summertime Query

Dear Agent, Precocious ten year-old Summer Thomas is in love with her older sister's best friend. There's just one problem - he's twenty two. When her sister, Rachel, leaves home for college Summer is distressed. But then Rachel's best friend Zach, who Summer is head over heels for, returns home. De...
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 7:02 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: When Google steals your word...
Replies: 10
Views: 1716

Re: When Google steals your word...

Scott wrote:Sometimes, even if you think you can "get away with it" isn't it just better to change it? As a writer, I'm always trying to be as original as I can be unless I'm satirizing or lampooning something for effect.
Great advice Scott. :D
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Fantasy Novel Query-- "3rd" draft
Replies: 17
Views: 3701

Re: Fantasy Novel Query-- "2nd" draft

I'd probably read it, but I agree with bgannon. Focus on what they said an you'll have a killer query.
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Children of the Lost
Replies: 5
Views: 930

Re: Children of the Lost

I like the premise but the query has to much irrelevant information regarding yourself and can be condensed into two nice paragraphs. You shouldn't mention so many characters either, unless they are crucial to the plot. I'd definitely give it a test read though because the title was intriguing.
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:43 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Whip-Slip query
Replies: 68
Views: 8557

Re: The Whip-Slip query

This query gets kind of confusing towards the end, and I think that something besides the slips and the whips should be used for your villains. Something more menacing. The names Tully and Thea are also easy to mix up, and Tully sounds sort of strange for a teen in this day and time. My opinion thou...
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Thorn Tree - YA Paranormal
Replies: 11
Views: 1953

Re: The Thorn Tree - YA Paranormal

I don't think it's bad but it's lacking that umph that makes me want to read a horror/supernatural story. It sounds sort of like a Fear Street novel, but without the hook. Or like Scooby Doo and the Witches Ghost. BTW I think Carolyn needs a bigger reason to not tell anyone at school about Lansford....
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:25 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a YA Crit Partner
Replies: 2
Views: 1243

Re: Looking for a YA Crit Partner

I haven't written any fantasy novels, just a bunch of shorts, but I have written a realistic fiction. Is that alright? Your story has an interesting premise, glad it isn't just romance boy meets girl forbidden love thing.
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:22 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a YA Writing Buddy
Replies: 1
Views: 996

Re: Looking for a YA Writing Buddy

I don't think it's bad. But the main thing that distracts me is the long blocks of text and the lack of spaces between paragraphs. But I think it starts out really well. I like that you get straight to the point. Is this going to be sort of like a Judy Blume novel, because it reminds me of It's Not ...
by androidblues
September 30th, 2010, 6:00 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Do You Represent Romance Novels?
Replies: 2
Views: 1028

Re: Romance Novels

Mr. Bransford says that he will represent just about anything. Check his faq.