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by pollymilton
September 30th, 2010, 8:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Bring Me Back, women's fiction--Updated 9/23
Replies: 32
Views: 5653

Re: Query: Bring Me Back, women's fiction--Updated 9/23

I'm busily avoiding making dinner, so let me say that I really like your last version. And how cool to see it change over time. I bet this will hit!
Polly
by pollymilton
September 30th, 2010, 8:13 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Thorn Tree - YA Paranormal
Replies: 11
Views: 2520

Re: The Thorn Tree - YA Paranormal

Just from a rhythmic standpoint, I don't think you need the name of the town. It yanks the reader right out. How about something like "When her new friend John Lanford asks a favor, she's eager to help, since he was a friend of her mother's, too." I wonder if you can make clear the split she's facin...
by pollymilton
September 30th, 2010, 6:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
Replies: 24
Views: 4990

Re: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2

you bet. I would say here: She fears that seeing him will scrape at the shields of selfhood she has constructed against him, leaving only the battered core of the nine-year-old child he tried to kill in a drunken rage. In addition to arousing painful memories, his return seems to awaken ghosts from ...
by pollymilton
September 30th, 2010, 3:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2
Replies: 24
Views: 4990

Re: The Drunkard's Daughter: Started from Scratch, see p. 2

Hi! I am very new and I can see that you've been working long and hard on this. Did you know that one of the biggest problems actors have is called "indicating'? They're concerned that just saying the words, living and breathing and being there with their partner won't be enough, so they work very h...
by pollymilton
September 30th, 2010, 12:12 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3979

THE REMEDY: new try at query. Upmarket women's fic.

NEW TRY: Dear Ms. Agent: Maggie Cooper is smart and lucky. She always makes the right decisions. Then Will shows up after 20 years and changes everything. He’s left flaming footprints in the street and she barely recognizes him; a sensible woman like her should turn him down. Maggie chooses one nig...
by pollymilton
September 28th, 2010, 10:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3979

Re: THE REMEDY - Query - Women's upmarket fiction

rrgh. Here's the deal. It's a fairy tale for grownups but it's not "airy fairy" in any way. Magical Realism. Will and Maggie are the main characters. Will and his two brothers are magic. A long time ago, the oldest brother Charlie took a wedding night that wasn't his. That created a powerful but fla...
by pollymilton
September 28th, 2010, 7:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3979

Re: THE REMEDY - Query - Women's upmarket fiction

Thanks sgf - it's been driving me nuts and I haven't cracked it yet.
I'll keep thinking!
Polly
by pollymilton
September 28th, 2010, 4:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3979

THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction

Dear Agent: Maggie Cooper is smart and lucky; she’s so lucky that her heart is split and she doesn’t even know it. Will shows up one fall night and Maggie takes him in. If Will and Maggie can be together three times, Maggie will be safe and Will can be free of the idiot magic that holds him. Three t...