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by priya g.
January 3rd, 2011, 6:01 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Cover Letter?
Replies: 3
Views: 974

Cover Letter?

Hi Nathan! Just a few quick questions: I read the submissions details of an agency and they require the first three chapters, a short, preferably one page, synopsis and cover letter of the novel. They have explicitly asked for any history of publication and samples in the last requirement (cover let...
by priya g.
November 27th, 2010, 3:35 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised query HARP-BROKEN, take 2 (at end)
Replies: 8
Views: 1710

Re: Revised query HARP-BROKEN

Agent comments... In YA fantasy HARP-BROKEN, a girl finds her destiny linked with young Irish gods and goddesses who abandoned mythical Tir Na Nog to live as regular kids. Saving them and her missing dad will put her on a collision course with the supernatural world they left--and her own desire to...
by priya g.
November 27th, 2010, 3:26 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN
Replies: 8
Views: 1482

Re: Mainstream Novel Query - THE DIM MAN

All advice is welcome - just trying to get better. Thanks! Dear Agent – Tim Mann has no soul. Or at least that’s what the latest popular computer application says. Saddled already with a worsening and debilitating heart problem, HOW ABOUT YOU SIMPLY STATE THE PROBLEM? THAT WAY, WE KNOW THE GRAVITY ...
by priya g.
November 9th, 2010, 4:02 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Romance Query: COVET *Revision 3 posted (4.5.11)*
Replies: 19
Views: 3914

Re: Romance Query: COVET * Revision posted at end*

Dear Agent, Lucas has always loved Adelais. Even as a boy when she’d kick his shins for stuffing frogs down her smock. GOOD HOOK It’s best she knows nothing of this love; he could never make her happy. As a professional soldier for the King’s Elite Army, Lucas is a highly ranked and highly trained ...
by priya g.
November 4th, 2010, 3:08 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby: giving it another shot
Replies: 26
Views: 3398

Re: A Lullaby: giving it another shot

Dear Agent, Agora Beckwith is a descendant of the Sun People, a race that has the ability to absorb fire in their bodies My first reaction is "cool", but my second is, "So? Is that a useful talent?" . As she cycles through the phases of reincarnation Explain this. Seems to come out of the blue... ,...
by priya g.
November 2nd, 2010, 2:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby: giving it another shot
Replies: 26
Views: 3398

Re: A Lullaby: giving it another shot

Excuse me Android and Melissa, I dont intend to be rude but I set up this topic for my query critique and the past few posts have nothing to do with that. Please use the PM facility. there is another topic for introductions in one of the other forums.

Thanks
by priya g.
November 1st, 2010, 3:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby: giving it another shot
Replies: 26
Views: 3398

Re: A Lullaby: giving it another shot

thanks for the comments. will begin on the next draft ASAP.
by priya g.
October 30th, 2010, 5:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby: giving it another shot
Replies: 26
Views: 3398

Re: A Lullaby: giving it another shot

next version (based on Melissa's invaluable comments) Dear Agent, Agora Beckwith is a descendant of the Sun People, a race that has the ability to absorb fire in their bodies. As she cycles through the phases of reincarnation, Agora is awed by the exponential progress of the human race, which only s...
by priya g.
October 30th, 2010, 2:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - New Revision - Revision #3
Replies: 15
Views: 2772

Re: Query: HIDDEN IN PLAIN SIGHT - YA Sci-Fi / Fantasy

Dear Agent: Magellan SURNAME?’s life is turned upside down when the King rips him from his family and takes him to the royal residences. Confused and alone, Magellan is thrust into a world of nobles that want nothing to do with the son of the most hated man in the galaxy. THE FIRST PARAGRAPH IS GOO...
by priya g.
October 29th, 2010, 2:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Possessed
Replies: 23
Views: 3191

Re: Query - Possessed

Dear Agent, Gabriel SURNAME? is a murderer. Tormented by the memory, he volunteers for a psychological experiment designed to erase them SO HE IS THE ONE THAT IS CONDUCTING THE EXPERIMENT OR HE IS BEING EXPERIMENTED ON?. But the experiement SPELLING! fails. Then one of the participants - Adeline - ...
by priya g.
October 28th, 2010, 2:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Possessed
Replies: 23
Views: 3191

Re: Query - Possessed

Dear Agent, Nineteen year-old Gabriel is a murderer. He should not remember who is or what he has done, but the psychological experiment he volunteers for fails. WONDERFUL HOOK. Locked in a debriefing room, Gabriel and two other patients learn that the doctors have made a decision to terminate the ...
by priya g.
October 27th, 2010, 3:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Iron Pillar: Women's Fiction Query
Replies: 28
Views: 4595

Re: The Iron Pillar: Women's Fiction Query

Dear Mr. or Ms. Agent, I am currently seeking representation for my novel, THE IRON PILLAR. This 85,000 word piece of women’s fiction is the story of one woman’s transformative journey as she is subjected to love, loss, and the whimsical nature of fate—I believe it will be enjoyed by anyone who is ...
by priya g.
October 27th, 2010, 1:09 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis: The Iron Pillar (Women's Fiction)
Replies: 2
Views: 1588

Re: Synopsis: The Iron Pillar (Women's Fiction)

Daly English would rather keep to herself than risk opening her heart to pain. At twenty-five, she has felt pain enough for a lifetime; THE FIRST TWO SENTENCES WOULD SEEM LIKE A GOOD OPENING FOR A QUERY LETTER OR BLURB. I WOULD SUGGEST YOU JUMP RIGHT INTO HER PROBLEMS SO THAT THE READER, E.G. AGENT...
by priya g.
October 27th, 2010, 11:15 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby: giving it another shot
Replies: 26
Views: 3398

Re: A Lullaby: giving it another shot

Hi Priya These are my comments coming into the situation with a completely fresh perspective. And thank you for your comments on my query! I would definitely benefit from a desi writer friend. I force my husband and sis-in-law to proofread, but neither is a writer, so... Anyway! VERSION # 1,000,000...
by priya g.
October 26th, 2010, 1:36 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 250 words: YA fantasy
Replies: 10
Views: 2894

Re: First 250 words: YA fantasy

Thanks to all for the comments

i am working on the next draft, will post it up soon!