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by Kalthandrix
May 12th, 2010, 10:25 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words
Replies: 12
Views: 2607

Re: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words

Edited Chapter I - ---- Chapter 1- Phnor The cry that split the cool morning air launched entire flocks of akalats and red-necked nightjars into the sky above the Tir Forest with an accompanying chorus of startled peeps and kyok-kyok-kyok . The sorrowful wail carried on and on as if a soul were scre...
by Kalthandrix
May 12th, 2010, 10:18 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words
Replies: 12
Views: 2607

Re: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words

Great comments! Thanks. I fell that I do have to keep the reference to the apothecary and the priest though. The reason is that in the next chapter Phnor will have an encounter with troops from the Unity and I want it already established that he does not like them. I think it sets up the next chapte...
by Kalthandrix
May 12th, 2010, 1:50 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 1114

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery

Hello! Let me start by saying that I do not read mystery, well not since my younger years with The Hardy Boys, so I do not consider myself any sort of expert on this genre. I liked the over-all read of the material--it was interesting and I would have kept on reading if there had been more. That bei...
by Kalthandrix
May 12th, 2010, 1:03 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Short excerpt from current literary fiction book
Replies: 4
Views: 1285

Re: Short excerpt from current literary fiction book

I thought that this was a solid showing and an interesting read, but it was confusing as well. Partially because I assume there is a good bit of material before this section that establishes the relationship between the characters. It does read as narration though, but that is an easy fix with some ...
by Kalthandrix
May 12th, 2010, 12:45 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words
Replies: 12
Views: 2607

Re: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words

You certainly can write - this was entertianing. I kind of got lost there in the middle with all of the imagery. In fact, if I had to give one critique, it would be that you should probably be careful how much imagery and poetic prose you insert into the book. You clearly have a talent for writing ...
by Kalthandrix
May 11th, 2010, 10:32 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Words I Can't Stop Using
Replies: 30
Views: 5628

Re: Words I Can't Stop Using

I have not used Wordle because all my chapters are either in long-hand or in their own word document at this point, but I know that I use the word though way too much.
by Kalthandrix
May 11th, 2010, 9:59 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words
Replies: 12
Views: 2607

Knowledge (working title) - opening 1,120 words

I have not been about much, and for that I apologize. RL has been dragging me down and kicking me for fun. Anyway, I was hoping to get some bit of feedback on the opening chapter of my novel. I welcome all comments and critiques of my work and I vow to also lend my own feedback to the community. Tha...
by Kalthandrix
May 11th, 2010, 9:29 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Time to Fess Up - How Long Is It Taking You?
Replies: 48
Views: 11686

Re: Time to Fess Up - How Long Is It Taking You?

Hmmmm...well I began my novel in/around January 2007 when my second daughter was born. I have had some great spots of writing where I get a lot done, and then other times where I will go six months without adding new material or doing revisions. Of course, my novel is about 140k(-ish) and am working...
by Kalthandrix
December 7th, 2009, 10:28 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: The New Website
Replies: 23
Views: 5389

Re: The New Website

Nice new digs! Anyway, so there I am, minding my own business (clearly) and writing, when I decide to check my e-mail and what do I find?The question is rhetorical because you know what I found...a new post from Nathan and the mention of forums. And once I got into the forums, what do you think I fo...