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by littlebird
February 25th, 2011, 2:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Thorn Tree - YA Paranormal
Replies: 11
Views: 2125

Re: The Thorn Tree - YA Paranormal

Call me stupid, but I wasn't aware there was a genre 'Supernatural.' I thought it was all paranormal. My bad. Your first paragraph is a little convoluted. I don't feel motivated to read on. Maybe start with something about the accidents, "Disaster follows Carolyn Lepworth. Her parents were killed i...
by littlebird
February 25th, 2011, 2:34 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE DIM- New Query
Replies: 8
Views: 1257

Re: THE DIM- New Query

I remember you from shark too! Have you reposted to her yet or are you hanging out here until you feel like your have it right? Either way, good luck! QUERY 1- When HOPE WALTON lost her awesome mom in a stupid earthquake, even a buttload of pills couldn’t numb the pain. (I think you're a little hea...
by littlebird
February 25th, 2011, 2:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Replies: 41
Views: 6439


I don't think there is much I can add that hasn't already been said, but I wouldn't start out with the quote from the bible. Just get to the meat. And unless you're story has a "come to Christ" undertone, I wouldn't list it as Christian Fiction (someone said that in a previous reply). I think you're...
by littlebird
February 25th, 2011, 2:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - The Coming
Replies: 6
Views: 1570

Re: Query - The Coming

I'm totally NOT a professional at this, but I've read a lot of querying articles, follow query shark, have done NBs query mad lib, and this query breaks ALL the rules. But sometimes a good query does just that. If I was rewriting this query by the rules, I'd do it as follows: Dear Agent, Vitiosus a...
by littlebird
February 25th, 2011, 1:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: VANGUARD query
Replies: 5
Views: 885

Re: VANGUARD query

I neither read nor write romance, so please take my comments with that in mind. Dear agent, I am seeking representation for my romantic thriller, VANGUARD, set in a fictionalized redrawing of Northern Europe. The manuscript is complete at 91,000 words. I'd move that to the end. After years of missed...