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by TigerGray
September 1st, 2010, 3:11 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: THE WYRM FIEND a YA Urban Fantasy UPDATED
Replies: 11
Views: 2494

Re: THE WYRM FIEND a YA Urban Fantasy UPDATED

Comments. Somewhat short since my idiot computer ate my first reply. Is the Fraternity the sort of toothless group that spoon feeds its new recruits? Because that is how, go kill this immobilized creature to prove your worth reads to me. Now I am guessing that the test is quite dangerous even with t...
by TigerGray
September 1st, 2010, 2:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Figments - YA Urban Fantasy Query
Replies: 5
Views: 946

Re: Figments - YA Urban Fantasy Query

I am..confused. You almost had me with the whole the day her father died is the day thing, but since I have no insider knowledge of your book the name drop is meaningless to me, as is Leander as a character, if you don't flesh him out. I find myself wishing for some connective tissue tying the first...
by TigerGray
September 1st, 2010, 12:23 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: WYRM FIEND query YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 30
Views: 3844

Re: WYRM FIEND query YA Urban Fantasy

Uh, I am going to go out on a limb here and say "wyrm" is a fairly common fantasy term. No one in to this sort of story should need to look it up.
by TigerGray
August 30th, 2010, 1:21 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Sacrificial Magic
Replies: 11
Views: 1907

Re: Query: Sacrificial Magic

important things to think about. i appreciate the help.
by TigerGray
August 30th, 2010, 12:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Sacrificial Magic
Replies: 11
Views: 1907

Re: Query: Sacrificial Magic

Thanks D.S. I appreciate your time.

Can I ask why "surrounding environs" bothers you? My MC is an academic sort of guy and I wanted to capture his rather formal way of speaking. Is it not working for you in that sense?

Thanks again.
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 11:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Sacrificial Magic
Replies: 11
Views: 1907

Re: Query: Sacrificial Magic

Thanks very much. Since I think the first rule of accepting crit is shutting up, I will only say that the reference to orange is from Nathan's article on query personalization. I've read every single query shark entry and if I were querying her I would certainly put that at the bottom. Kristin Nelso...
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 7:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4457

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

Well, her query says it's fantasy, not YA. I don't write YA myself so I don't know if the age of the character automatically makes it YA, but I suspect not.
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 7:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4457

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

Sometimes we all need a break away. Writing and revising makes us weird after awhile! I like to watch bad t.v. at those times.

:P
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 6:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4457

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

No problem. 100,00 strikes me as acceptable, certainly. Don't worry. You will get the format down. We all will, if we keep trying.
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 6:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4457

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

#2 I disagree. It's fantasy and fantasy has a little more leeway. What I have read suggests it can push 120k, though the shorter the better, of course.


50k is also too short for most places. 80k--120k
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 5:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Griffinborn
Replies: 9
Views: 1593

Re: Query - Griffinborn

Rory Balenford was a roguish young thief who was never sure of his place in the world till he picked the wrong pocket and got drafted. Twelve years later, he’s a young captain in the Ducal Guard of the Griffin Lords. Is the name drop needed? I know sometimes too many names early on can put people o...
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 5:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Sacrificial Magic
Replies: 11
Views: 1907

Query: Sacrificial Magic

I addressed this to Nathan so I could practice personalization. Have at! Thank you in advance (this is actually like 350 words, which just skates by for word count on a query.) *** Mr. Bransford, I am a regular participant on your forums. I appreciate the time you take out of your busy day to encour...
by TigerGray
August 29th, 2010, 4:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:Forever Young-YA Urban Fantasy (version 2)
Replies: 8
Views: 1215

Re: Query:Forever Young-YA Urban Fantasy (version 2)

For me, the premise just does not work on a base level. The parents are keeping this big secret--and even with the revision I didn't understand that whole thing--but they haven't invested in a little basic forgery? This kid is thirteen. It's not an age known for its diverse skill sets. I know this i...
by TigerGray
August 27th, 2010, 8:59 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 327716

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

http://tigergray.blogspot.com/2010/08/t ... ittle.html

yep! some blindness and some writingz. woo.
by TigerGray
August 27th, 2010, 7:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Chasing Miracles - Fantasy [Last Post - Updated] Try Nth! XD
Replies: 31
Views: 4457

Re: Chasing Miracles - Christian Fantasy

I totally am horrible at this. My book is so plotfilled and twisty with sub-stuff that it's hard to smoosh it down into one little letter. I have been reading websites and books and I still have never been great at condensing and answering that question of "what's it about". So here goes nothing......