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by maggie
December 7th, 2010, 7:14 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE ELITE (YA) -revised!
Replies: 29
Views: 4662

Re: THE ELITE (YA)

Thanks so much gilesth and oldhousejunkie! I want to give a hug to everyone who's helped me here, but, ya know, I don't know you, so I suppose it would be strange. :) So I'll just settle for a big thank you!! I'm posting a new try below. I took a lot of your suggestions, but trying to explain some t...
by maggie
December 6th, 2010, 9:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: *Revised* QUERY: THE DRAKE WAR
Replies: 40
Views: 7307

Re: QUERY: THE DRAKE WAR

This sounds interesting! Dear Ms. Agent: After faking her death to escape a group of supernatural mercenaries, Lillim Callina has been eking out her life as a paranormal investigator. When a seemingly routine case causes her to inadvertently kidnap an infant, she finds herself at the center of a plo...
by maggie
December 6th, 2010, 9:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Meant To Be---another new version
Replies: 61
Views: 8141

Re: Meant To Be---another new version

Yea, I understand that. I think that talking a lot about their unhappy marriages makes people think "affair" because in women's fiction, these kinds of descriptions so often end up with, "...and that's why she slept with the pool boy," or whatever. :) I do like the structure of this one of your quer...
by maggie
December 6th, 2010, 9:34 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE ELITE (YA) -revised!
Replies: 29
Views: 4662

Re: THE ELITE (YA)

Thanks so much for your comments, Lil. I see how the last paragraph can seem a little confusing, and I'm going to work on tightening it. I'm trying to get across the idea that her choice between the two boys is BOTH about choosing who she likes best and about a choice that has to do with this prophe...
by maggie
December 5th, 2010, 10:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE ELITE (YA) -revised!
Replies: 29
Views: 4662

Re: THE ELITE (YA)

Modified for the above comments... (Thanks for the comments so far. Please feel free to be brutally honest. It won't bother me! :) This is the first time I've put the query out in public, so I'm glad to know what people think, good or bad, even if it's just general comments and not line edits. Thank...
by maggie
December 5th, 2010, 5:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Harbinger
Replies: 22
Views: 2884

Re: Query: Harbinger

This sounds like an interesting story! I haven't read your previous versions of the query or your synopsis, and I'm going to not do so on purpose so as to be most like an agent reading this for the first time... Dear [Agent], Micah is nearly out of high school, ready to make his way in the world. Un...
by maggie
December 5th, 2010, 5:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE ELITE (YA) -revised!
Replies: 29
Views: 4662

Re: THE ELITE (YA)

Thank you so much for your comments! Very helpful. alienbogey--You're totally right. I can trend towards the melodramatic occasionally and I need to watch out for it. :) netti--I agree about that paragraph--I also feel like it's not quite right, but I can't put my finger on why. Good to know someone...
by maggie
December 5th, 2010, 1:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE ELITE (YA) -revised!
Replies: 29
Views: 4662

THE ELITE (YA) -revised!

Revised version 2/27/11 on page 2 Hi everyone! I've gone through a few drafts of my query and am at that stage where I think I'm too close to it and need an outside perspective. Thanks SO much in advance for any thoughts, advice, etc! (This is just the descriptive part of the query for the moment--...
by maggie
December 5th, 2010, 1:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Meant To Be---another new version
Replies: 61
Views: 8141

Re: Meant To Be---another new version

Hi! What strikes me about your two different versions is that, to me, they almost seem like different books. Obviously I haven't read your book so I'm not sure which is more like the story, but the shorter version that starts with the logline seems to me like a story of two friends, who are no longe...
by maggie
December 2nd, 2010, 8:04 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Detailed Synopsis Crit Partner? (YA)
Replies: 4
Views: 1573

Detailed Synopsis Crit Partner? (YA)

Hello! This is probably a little bit different critique partner request than most. I've read a couple places recently about having someone critique your SYNOPSIS before writing the whole book to make sure you don't write 250 pages of something that makes no sense, and I think it's a great idea! I've...
by maggie
October 5th, 2010, 12:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Revision is Terrifying
Replies: 0
Views: 458

Revision is Terrifying

It is. Absolutely, completely, horrifyingly scary. Because once you're revising, you have to man up. Take credit for your story. Be ready to tell people that yep, this is the best I can do. The first draft is so full of potential, it practically has glitter pouring out its ears. In a first draft, yo...
by maggie
October 4th, 2010, 11:59 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Nanowrimo
Replies: 88
Views: 21689

Re: Nanowrimo

I love NaNoWriMo! I've done it for the past 3 years, and for me personally (though I'm sure everyone is different!) I realized pretty quickly that if I'm actually trying to get the full 50,000 words, I should not work on something I really care about. That is just a ton of words in a short time, and...
by maggie
October 4th, 2010, 11:47 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy
Replies: 3
Views: 1363

Re: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy

I really like the idea of this! I feel like this is something I would pick up as a new twist on urban fantasy. I saw your query too, and in comparison, one thing I found that you might want to watch out for in your synopsis is making sure it comes off as the correct age range. There were a few times...
by maggie
September 30th, 2010, 11:50 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Getting Motivated
Replies: 12
Views: 1577

Re: Getting Motivated

Ha, only the beginning--you are so right. Fortunately, I guess I fudged a little saying it's the first draft--it's the first draft this time around. I had a draft but totally scrapped it, so this is like the Second First Draft. All first draft in terms of the actual prose, but with the benefit of ha...
by maggie
September 30th, 2010, 11:47 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: The importance (and difficulty) of gestures
Replies: 55
Views: 26126

Re: The importance (and difficulty) of gestures

Wow, that is...
F**king brilliant!

Awesome :)