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by ninafromnorway
August 28th, 2010, 5:58 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: YA - adventure/mystery Chapter one (a little shorter)
Replies: 5
Views: 1338

Re: YA - adventure/mystery Chapter one

Gosh, that looks so much longer than the A5 pages I have on my Word...
by ninafromnorway
August 28th, 2010, 5:54 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: YA - adventure/mystery Chapter one (a little shorter)
Replies: 5
Views: 1338

YA - adventure/mystery Chapter one (a little shorter)

After posting my prologue, I was given advice to drop it and just go right to the first chapter. As my chapters are a little long, I'll give you the first chapter. As I am Norwegian I know there are quite a few grammar mistakes there. But mostly I'm interested on how you'd score this as for storytel...
by ninafromnorway
August 28th, 2010, 5:37 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: YA - adventure/mystery Prologue
Replies: 10
Views: 1869

Re: YA - adventure/mystery Prologue

To Krista G: Thanks again for your feedback. First of all, the such as: My uncle is an English teacher, so when I showed him the original writing that said: “as if a barb wire was wrapped around my stomach being pulled by horses on each side”, he wanted me to change it to “such as”. At the moment I ...
by ninafromnorway
August 27th, 2010, 12:28 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: YA - adventure/mystery Prologue
Replies: 10
Views: 1869

Re: YA - adventure/mystery Prologue

Thanks a load for your advice. I'm just about to get my children up for kindergarten, before I'm off to work. So I'll have to give you a more thorough reply tonight.


Nina
by ninafromnorway
August 26th, 2010, 4:25 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: I am very excited
Replies: 2
Views: 517

I am very excited

Today my artist friend finished illustrating my childrens book, so I have written a Query and then tomorrow it will be printed and sent. A small step for you, a huge step for Nina - kind! I will now go about writing my second childrens book. It appears to be all I have time for these days, now that ...
by ninafromnorway
August 26th, 2010, 3:50 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Help Critiquing Dialogue
Replies: 8
Views: 2082

Re: Help Critiquing Dialogue

I was really just going to repeat what the others had said, so I won't do that. Try and close your eyes and pretend to be your MC and Ugh (fancy name by the way ;-p) Don't think writing, think movie. How would they be talking to each other in a film? What would they sound like, how would the pitch i...
by ninafromnorway
August 25th, 2010, 4:10 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: YA - adventure/mystery Prologue
Replies: 10
Views: 1869

YA - adventure/mystery Prologue

I would love to hear your opinion of the prologue of the first book I am writing. It is an adventure/mystery book, mainly for females in the age 16 +. Be honest, I can take it! =) Prologue I was sure my spine was going to break this time – such as barb wire wrapped around my stomach being pulled by ...
by ninafromnorway
August 15th, 2010, 6:12 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 41337

Re: Share your opening sentence!

"You're just not despicable enough," was the last and only thing they said before they banished him. I did like this one! I'd actually give this one a 10! Usually people strive to become successfull, perfect, beautiful and popular. But here you are told that they want you to be worse! This may have...
by ninafromnorway
August 15th, 2010, 6:05 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Can we start calling it something other than a query?
Replies: 18
Views: 2942

Re: Can we start calling it something other than a query?

Move to Norway... we don't even need query letters here. We just send in the manuscript. One of the advantages of living in a small country!
by ninafromnorway
August 13th, 2010, 6:28 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 41337

Re: Share your opening sentence!

theepicwinner: I'd give it a 5/10. It's not particularily exciting in itself, but I want to know if the earthquake is a metaphor, or if it is the beginning of the end of the world. It sort of promises ecxitement. I changed my first sentence to my current WIP. Previously it was: I cringed as the wave...
by ninafromnorway
August 13th, 2010, 6:13 am
Forum: Books
Topic: Dead And Alive: Who Are Your Favorite Writers?
Replies: 22
Views: 3370

Re: Dead And Alive: Who Are Your Favorite Writers?

... she is extraordinary in the way that she forces you to sympathize with the offender in her books. That be a murderer, a pedophile og a rapist. In some ways I hate reading her books, because I know I'm going to like what I read, and hate myself for liking it. And that's why I also love her books...
by ninafromnorway
August 13th, 2010, 6:10 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Improving my writing
Replies: 19
Views: 3223

Re: Improving my writing

That's what I thought. I'll keep noting them down and learning these to me somewhat unfamiliar words.
by ninafromnorway
August 12th, 2010, 6:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you get yourself to write?
Replies: 40
Views: 10539

Re: How do you get yourself to write?

Doing isn't my problem. Finding time for it or a place where there is zero distraction is more complicated!
by ninafromnorway
August 12th, 2010, 6:45 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Improving my writing
Replies: 19
Views: 3223

Re: Improving my writing

theepicwinner: May I then ask if you have read Twilight? I haven't read many English novels, but I have read Twilight and there I found some words difficult and I had to look them up. I'm not sure if some of her words are a little university degree-ish, but I know that her books is written for teena...
by ninafromnorway
August 12th, 2010, 3:10 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Dead And Alive: Who Are Your Favorite Writers?
Replies: 22
Views: 3370

Re: Dead And Alive: Who Are Your Favorite Writers?

Dead is Shakespeare, for the same reasons as you. Alive is Karin Fossum, a Norwegian author. She writes a lot of mysteries and she is extraordinary in the way that she forces you to sympathize with the offender in her books. That be a murderer, a pedophile og a rapist. In some ways I hate reading he...