Nathan Bransford - The Forums

I'm a reader, I'm a lurker I'm a mid-night poster (ahem, sorry Steve Miller). I'm Ian and from the UK, and when I'm not ruining classic songs, I'm wrestling with the revisions of my first novel. I am faithful to her, but must admit there's that saucy neighbour - the half-finished YA fantasy story, t...

Brandi, I like this query a lot. We get the age, name, setting and character all in the first sentence. It might be a touch too long, but that's easily broken up if you want to. I've added a couple of (very small) comments in the quote. Dear [Agent], Sixteen-year-old Jade, the youngest of Thorndarl’...

From my current MG novel (undergoing 2nd draft):

I just wish something would happen in my life, anything.


From my half-completed fantasy novel:

Otto Shranck watched from his vantage point in the rafters, listening to the rain dancing on the roof above and admiring the man’s work below.