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by hulbertsfriend
September 4th, 2010, 10:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Water in the River REVISED
Replies: 8
Views: 1534

Re: Query: The Water in the River

I need help. I keep re-writing and coming up with the same thing. Do I need a little more, do I reveal a little more...do I quit and burn the thing? Dear…, Clara Herrington has always heard Name of river river speaking to her - she just didn't know it. Clara and Maggie haven't been friends for year...
by hulbertsfriend
September 4th, 2010, 8:14 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: 10 reasons e-books might not eat the world
Replies: 90
Views: 23772

Re: 10 reasons e-books might not eat the world

In a perfect world, there would be an amalgam of paper and e-book. The problem lies in the thinning of paper book publishers due to small bottom lines on their spredsheets. I have no doubt that quite a few small publishing houses will fail during this paper vs. e-book showdown. When this happens, an...
by hulbertsfriend
September 4th, 2010, 7:32 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: JACOB WONDERBAR - the cover!!
Replies: 28
Views: 3957

Jacob Wonderbar

Amazon is offering to send you an e-mail when Nathan's book will be on sale. Might help them to know how many people are interested????

DougM
by hulbertsfriend
September 3rd, 2010, 7:31 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: JACOB WONDERBAR - the cover!!
Replies: 28
Views: 3957

Re: JACOB WONDERBAR - the cover!!

Great cover! Congaratulations!

DougM
by hulbertsfriend
September 3rd, 2010, 1:25 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/3/10
Replies: 21
Views: 22477

Re: Page Critique Friday 9/3/10

I think this is very well done. Dialogue heavy is fine when it's handled well and I believe you have good transition, the speakers are clearly identified. I am not a fan of the "Jim said", "Eddie observed" add-ons after a portion of dialogue. If this is your first page, you still have done enough to...
by hulbertsfriend
September 2nd, 2010, 9:36 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Music Suggestions for Writing
Replies: 14
Views: 2582

Music that inspires you

I'm curious if anyone here listens to music when they write. What is your favorite song that inspires you? For me, "Cinnamon Girl" by Neil Young and Crazy Horse, LIVE seems to get me writing when I can't get motivated? This song works really well when writing a female character's actions... Just me?...
by hulbertsfriend
September 1st, 2010, 12:23 am
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 336316

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

Started a blog a while ago. Mostly to just write. Renamed the site after writing my MS. http://devinbriar.blogspot.com/

I plan to start posting things of interest... Anyone is welcome to contribute, just give me a link through here.

DougM
by hulbertsfriend
August 30th, 2010, 12:59 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First Page YA: opinions on voice and technique appreciated
Replies: 30
Views: 5719

Re: First Page YA: opinions on voice and technique appreciated

Teenage angst has a character all its own. I think if you can hold her "it's all about me" anger, you have a compelling character, provided you balance it with attempts at understanding. Your character is obviously going to be deeper than this page. You present a moment of frailty that came off well...
by hulbertsfriend
August 28th, 2010, 3:10 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 191226

Re: Ask Nathan

Hi Nathan,

The first part is evey bit as strong as the second. I have the EDIT PEN out now and hope to get the "first part" down in the 130000 range. Still huge for a first time novelest I know, but that is where the story can be separated cleanly.
by hulbertsfriend
August 28th, 2010, 2:14 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 191226

Re: Ask Nathan

Hi Nathan, Through feedback on my MS, I have split the book into two novels. Will the second book be short on words you ask? Nooooo. the original manuscript was finished (before major edit) at 273000. I found a perfect place to split the book, not halfway, but it still left the second book with 1150...
by hulbertsfriend
August 27th, 2010, 6:23 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: Writer's conferences?
Replies: 13
Views: 2392

Writer's conferences?

Had a look at a few writers conferences. Are there any that are notable? How about the Southern California Writers Conference this September? Is attending a conference worthwhile?
by hulbertsfriend
August 27th, 2010, 2:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How much detail for readers outside the USA
Replies: 11
Views: 2181

Re: How much detail for readers outside the USA

This is what I was concerned with for the most part. I have a Senator who is extremely powerful and ever present in the story. She works on a number of committees in the Senate that we would recognize as important, but people outside the USA may not. I thought that these sections would be canidates ...
by hulbertsfriend
August 27th, 2010, 1:16 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 8/27/10
Replies: 27
Views: 20439

Re: Page Critique Friday 8/27/10

Thanks to Porthmeor Beach, whose page is below: TITLE: 'APOSTLE' GENRE: CRIME WORDCOUNT: 250 A white Transit van pulls into a long straight road by the town park, slows for the speed bumps, then indicates right. Pulls into a small car park in front of the two-story honeystone building that is Oakham...
by hulbertsfriend
August 26th, 2010, 7:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Valence
Replies: 6
Views: 973

Re: Valence

I read an interesting bit at http://www.cla.purdue.edu/english/theory/narratology The term focalize seemed to strike a cord. The term can be used in both writing and acting/cinema. "FOCALIZE (focalizer, focalized object): The presentation of a scene through the subjective perception of a character. ...
by hulbertsfriend
August 26th, 2010, 3:20 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How much detail for readers outside the USA
Replies: 11
Views: 2181

How much detail for readers outside the USA

I recently received feedback on my MS from someone in England. The response included questions about words like filibuster, Senator, Bill (Proposed law, not the guy) etc... How important is the explanation of these terms for foriegn readers, let alone readers here in the U.S. ? Only a few of these t...