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by c.ska
December 22nd, 2009, 5:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Night Butterfly - latest query draft!
Replies: 19
Views: 4213

Re: Night Butterfly - query feedback welcome!

REVISED QUERY BELOW...I'd very much appreciate your feedback, thanks! Dear Agent, (Personalised sentence) NIGHT BUTTERFLY is a 65,000 word gritty suspense novel with romantic elements. When Valentina Lebedeva’s 14-year-old sister Anya goes missing, she must leave her home in Russia to find her. The ...
by c.ska
December 22nd, 2009, 7:48 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG historical novel, query revised
Replies: 25
Views: 4336

Re: Query critique for MG historical novel

MHubbs, this sounds very interesting. Now let's see what I can do to help... I'm new to Nathan's blog and to the forum. Both have taught me a great deal already and I appreciate all the time and effort he has put into it. I'll be the next to throw myself to the lions. I've been paring down a query l...
by c.ska
December 20th, 2009, 7:52 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query critique - REVELATION: THE BOOK OF ANGEL- Revision 2
Replies: 19
Views: 4794

Re: Query critique - Revelation - REVISED.

BF, I read your first draft a few days ago; didn't comment because you were already revising. Now, having read the second draft, I just wanted to add confusion, and possibly frustration to the process! To me, the first attempt works better as a query. Short, clear and snappy - my opinion is it only ...
by c.ska
December 19th, 2009, 5:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Night Butterfly - latest query draft!
Replies: 19
Views: 4213

Re: Night Butterfly - query feedback welcome!

thanks everyone for taking the time n putting in the effort, I really appreciate all the comments! hopefully, revision should be a breeze! I look forward to hearing your views once I'm done. thanks again! c.ska ps not sure how to reply to the individual posts?! help please...meanwhile I'm afraid thi...
by c.ska
December 18th, 2009, 4:17 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Is doubt part of the process?
Replies: 10
Views: 2419

Re: Is doubt part of the process?

Doubt, in my opinion, is a writer's friend...used constructively it'll help you grow : )

Stay creative! c.ska
by c.ska
December 18th, 2009, 4:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Night Butterfly - latest query draft!
Replies: 19
Views: 4213

Night Butterfly - latest query draft!

PLEASE SCROLL DOWN TO FIND REVISED VERSION NUMBER FOUR ! Thanks. I finished the book. I even wrote the synopsis. But the query, well, it has been in working progress for some time now. I'd really appreciate your thoughts! Thanks... Dear Agent, (Personalised sentence) NIGHT BUTTERFLY is a 65,000 wor...
by c.ska
December 15th, 2009, 4:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Help: Museum Chronicles
Replies: 12
Views: 3317

Re: Query Help: Museum Chronicles

shannon, while the query is as mentioned slightly confusing, it left me wanting to read MORE. this is a good sign. your query needs to come alive, that's all. I have a feeling the actual book is both coherent and vivid. I hope the following comments may help : ) Feedback appreciated. /deep breath: W...
by c.ska
December 14th, 2009, 5:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: YA Victorian Fantasy
Replies: 8
Views: 2606

Re: Query: YA Victorian Fantasy

sandy, let me have a go: ) Dear Agent: THE BEAST'S APPRENTICE is a YA fantasy re-telling of "Beauty and the Beast" set in late Victorian era. (sounds good to me!) Growing up, Faye (had no interest in her mother's bedtime fairy tales,) SPENT ( as) all her time (were spent) trying to keep herself and ...
by c.ska
December 14th, 2009, 4:48 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Even Trees
Replies: 8
Views: 2089

Re: Even Trees

find my humble opinions below : ) Feedback very welcome. The box was cramped, dark and six feet underground. (love the first sentence) A year after his murder, Finneas Lamontagne (fabulous name...) awakes in his coffin to a voice whispering through the dirt above him offering him a second chance at ...
by c.ska
December 12th, 2009, 7:20 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: 1st round of rejections
Replies: 16
Views: 4160

Re: 1st round of rejections

choculagrl, I know I come in late on this, so I will keep it brief. First of all, I love the title. I would buy this book on the title alone, though I know it is silly to judge a book by its title. I also find the premise intriguing. And, while I agree with most of the previous feedback about the us...