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by clara_w
November 3rd, 2010, 5:13 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Bloody Hell, another synopsis, aaarrrgghh!
Replies: 2
Views: 1197

Re: Bloody Hell, another synopsis, aaarrrgghh!

All right, I'm actually Brazilian (born and raised!) so if you need any help with your book, send me a pm. Also, it seems to me there's a lot of Kardecist instruments here, so I'd advice you to watch the movie "Nosso Lar". I think it would help you a lot in your research, it would help you understan...
by clara_w
October 8th, 2010, 9:44 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Replies: 21
Views: 6859

Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?

This thread is a great idea! I'm looking, like everyone else here, for critique partners. I have written a 95.000 words YA fantasy in the final stages of revision. I'm a thorough critique partner, with an eagle eye for character development, showing x telling, plot inconcistensies, dialogues, flow a...
by clara_w
October 3rd, 2010, 4:23 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane
Replies: 7
Views: 2018

Re: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane

Thanks arbraun!

Wohoo, Im happy this looks good, you guys help me so much! You all ROCK! A LOT!
But please, if theres antything that doesnt sound good, or that can be improved, do tell =)
by clara_w
October 3rd, 2010, 4:20 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis: "The Princess and the Pirate" (9-14 year olds)
Replies: 8
Views: 2835

Re: Adventure fantasy synopsis for 9-14 year olds

ANA is a princess, and her grandmother SOL is a vicious pirate. Their worlds collide when the mysterious RANSOM sends Ana to find Sol and bring her home. He says Ana’s mum needs Sol’s help – but advises Ana not to actually tell Her Majesty about Sol’s return until later. Much, much later. When Ana ...
by clara_w
October 3rd, 2010, 4:15 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy
Replies: 3
Views: 1362

Re: Synopsis - FIGMENT - YA/Fantasy

GEORGE is AUDREY PARKER’s (17) imaginary friend. He was supposed to leave her to six years ago. ‘The Council,’ his leaders, expect him to return to his world for a new human assignment—after all, girls her age aren’t supposed to have pretend friends. Instead, he stays tucked in the back of her imag...
by clara_w
October 3rd, 2010, 4:05 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis: Book of Shadows
Replies: 13
Views: 3125

Re: Synopsis: Book of Shadows

Alex Benson just lost his wife to suicide, but that’s the least of his worries. With his wife's death haunting his thoughts, he finds he can no longer live a normal life and ends up at an Apostolic Pentecostal church. But the gods frown down on him again as his comfort zone is soon disrupted by an ...
by clara_w
October 1st, 2010, 11:26 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction
Replies: 5
Views: 1777

Re: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction

Thats really, really tricky Dave. I can only tell you how I'd handle this, which might not work at all. After all, I dont know your story in all its details and beauties, so, this might work for me, but it can also be a bunch of horses****, you know. In the end, we really have to do what we think it...
by clara_w
October 1st, 2010, 11:10 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane
Replies: 7
Views: 2018

Re: Synopsis: Jade's Hurricane

Thanks so much Whipslip! Actually, Lian wants revenge ont he shadow man because he planned her parents murders as well. But her first goal is to kill the Masha that shot them, and only the shadow man knows where they are. Therefore, she joins him, but will 'take care' of him when she's ready. Ill tr...
by clara_w
October 1st, 2010, 11:08 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: THE WYRM FIEND a YA Urban Fantasy UPDATED
Replies: 11
Views: 2613

Re: THE WYRM FIEND a YA Urban Fantasy UPDATED

Though most dragons have gone into hiding over the past few centuries, sixteen year old Chris Drake and his best friend, Yvonne Steele, are ready become modern dragon slayers. To finish their training, they must kill the dragon that their dads, Tim Drake and Derek Steele Wouldnt mention their names....
by clara_w
October 1st, 2010, 10:58 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction
Replies: 5
Views: 1777

Re: Synopsis - AMÉRICA! - historical fiction

San Martín deserts from the Spanish Army, absconding to Buenos Aires. Desperate to free his homeland, he must first free himself from his opium addiction. Interesting beginning here. Catalina’s Whats her connection to San Martin? father is murdered, leaving her to fend for herself in Valparaiso, but...
by clara_w
September 23rd, 2010, 3:35 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Whip-Slip query
Replies: 68
Views: 8975

Re: The Whip-Slip query

I really, really liked the latest version. One question though: Is her guardian Left-Hander? That wasnt very clear.

But on every other aspect: Congrats!!!
by clara_w
September 23rd, 2010, 3:31 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL
Replies: 9
Views: 1420

Re: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL

As others have said, your hook is definetly missing. A great advice someone here on the forums gave me is: Be specific. What did his son die of? Why does he burns the sheets? And so on. Being specific doesnt mean detailistic, specificity is filling us with entertaining details that helps us relate t...
by clara_w
September 21st, 2010, 4:29 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Jade's Hurricane: 6th try
Replies: 9
Views: 1315

Re: Jade's Hurricane: 6th try

Thank you whipslip, I think I got it fixed! =D
by clara_w
September 21st, 2010, 4:28 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Fantasy Novel Query-- "3rd" draft
Replies: 17
Views: 3885

Re: Fantasy Novel Query

I like this premise, a lot! I agree with others, we dont need the backstory on Ravenel and the knight. You could start by Kellek and the dracodane (which is probably one of the coolest things I've ever read! A dragon in the human form, brilliant =) And then you say: only the Knight can stop a monstr...
by clara_w
September 21st, 2010, 4:21 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Forever Young: The Rebirth revised..again
Replies: 8
Views: 1314

Re: Forever Young: The Rebirth revised..again

I liked it a lot more then the first. thanks fersnerfer! Yea, ms word kept auto correcting the or to 'and' for some reason...I thought or sounded better myself. Is this better? Aaren Danielson is a teenaged martial arts student whose life gets seriously screwed up when his adoptive parents drop a bo...