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by k10wnsta
October 1st, 2010, 6:08 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Passive Voice Debate
Replies: 40
Views: 11085

Re: Passive Voice Debate

Oh passive voice, what a trifling vagary at times...

I'd be keen to see analysis of a sentence like:

We wandered the neighborhood looking for a streetlight that wasn't surrounded by houses.
by k10wnsta
September 11th, 2010, 9:16 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
Replies: 33
Views: 30414

Re: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10

I rescind my appropriation of passive voice, because it was, as pointed out, mis appropriated. I've always included telling (rather than showing) as a mode of passivity in self-evaluation and I'm so far removed from the lit courses that taught the strict definition that I posted the way I would asse...
by k10wnsta
September 10th, 2010, 9:11 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10
Replies: 33
Views: 30414

Re: Page Critique Friday 9/10/10

Passive voice is an issue here (particularly with the first line). Reena mentioned the first line being reminiscent of a 'Three men walked into a bar...' joke, and that provides an excellent means to demonstrate passive voice vs. active voice: Which sounds better? Three men were walking into a bar.....
by k10wnsta
June 28th, 2010, 4:59 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Favorite quotes about writing
Replies: 62
Views: 9679

Re: Favorite quotes about writing

"You can't get there from here." Punchline of a traditional Mike and Pat joke Grandpa told when I was a toddler that carries on in family traditions. The joke pops into my head whenever I think about the complicated journeys writers go through, from inciting creative inspirations to publishing dest...
by k10wnsta
June 27th, 2010, 7:48 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Endings
Replies: 20
Views: 6937

Re: Endings

Polymath , If you're basically saying Frodo's development was static in that it was not the driving force, but rather being driven by the story, then I suppose that makes sense. I've always found it most profound that that which drove all of Frodo's actions throughout the story was the hope of retu...
by k10wnsta
June 26th, 2010, 4:20 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Endings
Replies: 20
Views: 6937

Re: Endings

... Lord of the Rings too. Is Frodo appreciably changed, or is Middle Earth what's really changed?... Polymath, While your post was meticulously detailed as usual, I have to differ on LotR being an example of a static character changing the setting. Yes, Frodo certainly changed the setting, but he ...
by k10wnsta
June 26th, 2010, 1:59 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Forum game: Random facts about you
Replies: 126
Views: 33220

Re: Forum game: Random facts about you

You asked for it... Random facts about me: I am currently making my 35th trip around the sun. Although I don't watch much television, my favorite show is iCarly (Squidbillies is a close second though). My cats are canaries in the coalmine of my imagination: As a child, any fear that followed waking...
by k10wnsta
June 17th, 2010, 6:14 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Excerpt--Shades of Gray: A Jude Magdalyn Novel
Replies: 6
Views: 2106

Re: Excerpt--Shades of Gray: A Jude Magdalyn Novel

Keep an eye on the tense of the narration - it was definitely the hardest aspect of first person storytelling for me to pin down. Beyond that, the opening passage is really solid. The exception: ' this private party ' might work better as ' the private party ',especially with ' this particular job '...
by k10wnsta
June 15th, 2010, 6:16 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 302671

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Cole Barrow's Driver on the Green Genre: Literary Non-fiction(?) (creative non-fiction? literary fiction? YA? memoirs? Who knows?...not me.) Word Count: ~240 of ~78,000 (* Note: Technically, this is the third page of the manuscript, but it's the first page of actual 'story' told in it. ) The...
by k10wnsta
June 15th, 2010, 4:36 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: You have another think coming
Replies: 35
Views: 10058

Re: You have another think coming

I'm astonished so many people are under the impression that 'thing' is correct. Is it just a situation where they've gone their entire lives without hearing the whole phrase ( 'If you think that, you got another think comin' )? I hope that's the case, cuz if you plug 'thing' in there, it makes very ...