Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Okay, I really enjoyed how this started. You have a good descriptive language, and by the time you come to the train collision, I felt all warm and cozy. Then you give your reader the sense that something bad will happen. Only, we never get to see what happens. The action is vague and the narrator t...

Well, you can colour me intrigued, but I have to say I wasn't overly interested until you got to the last paragraph. The reversal of the situation is great, though. As to why it didn't work out, I think it's because I don't get a strong sense of the characters. I wouldn't mind if it was only the par...