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by WilliamMJones
May 27th, 2010, 11:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query/fantasy - With All That I Am / 4th Version
Replies: 18
Views: 2753

Re: Query/fantasy - With All That I Am / 2nd Version

The story idea is very interesting, and the query has gotten alot better since the first draft. I do think there are two weak sentances that could be improved. Self pity only lasts so long before Vitara decides he wants to try to kill the wizard and save the town. This sentance is just kind of akwar...
by WilliamMJones
May 24th, 2010, 6:18 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Questions about editing, pre and post agent.
Replies: 13
Views: 2358

Re: Questions about editing, pre and post agent.

Thanks for all the answers. I didn't think editors and agents had time for full rewrites, but in most writing blogs I've read that both offer at least a few changes. Nathan says they send an "editorial letter suggesting content changes." And I wasn't sure what kind of changes. Now I know it varies f...
by WilliamMJones
May 23rd, 2010, 6:16 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Questions about editing, pre and post agent.
Replies: 13
Views: 2358

Questions about editing, pre and post agent.

I have never been published, so I'm not really sure what kind of editing gets done after submiting to an agent. Also, I'm a little unsure of the editing I'm doing now. First, what kind of editing should the first rewrite include? How much time do most people spend worrying about the story arc, and h...
by WilliamMJones
May 22nd, 2010, 10:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query/fantasy - With All That I Am / 4th Version
Replies: 18
Views: 2753

Re: Query/fantasy - With All That I Am

Here's a quick first draft of a query, for a fantasy novel. - - - When a wizard lays claim to Vitara’s life, in order to suck it dry to continue his immortality, Vitara has little chance to escape before the next full moon. This is an interesting hook. The town’s people shun and beat him because of...
by WilliamMJones
May 22nd, 2010, 5:29 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Thistledown: Genesis, Jay's story: Birth
Replies: 9
Views: 2010

Re: Thistledown: Genesis, Jay's story: Birth

This is the first time I've tried giving advice like this, so don't assume I know anything about what I'm talking about. I thought this chapter was interesting. It had me asking questions like: "What are the synths? Did humans make them, or something else? Are they in charge, or were they created fo...
by WilliamMJones
May 22nd, 2010, 12:14 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 191227

Re: Ask Nathan

Hi Nathan, I had a question about copyright laws. I just finished my first novel, and about halfway through one of my characters quotes the first part of a poem. "I’m Nobody, who are you? Are you Nobody too? Then there’s a pair of us, don’t tell! They’d banish us you know.” I just stared at her. “It...
by WilliamMJones
May 21st, 2010, 10:14 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 613
Views: 189936

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hi. I've been following the Blog for a while now, and decided to join the forums. I'm a college student and have just finished the first draft of my first novel.