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by daringnovelist
May 11th, 2010, 9:24 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 1113

Re: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery

Yikes! I did not see how much I used "furrowed brow" until you had it there in pink. The other things are noted. (One of the issues was simply a mistake - when I copied and pasted, underline/italics went away, which was what set off the note she wrote and underlined.) Thanks, Emily! I have been find...
by daringnovelist
May 11th, 2010, 2:52 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Is present tense ever okay?
Replies: 22
Views: 8442

Re: Is present tense ever okay?

The thing I don't like about present tense is that it feels like a synopsis. It's kind of like using second person - instead of actually being in the story, you end up hearing the voice of the narrator telling you the story. It can work, but it's better in very short or experimental works, IMHO. Cam...
by daringnovelist
May 11th, 2010, 2:05 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery
Replies: 6
Views: 1113

The Man Who Did Too Much opening - Mystery

This is the opening 5 pages of The Man Who Did Too Much, which is a cozy/suspense mystery. ***** Chapter 1 Doctor Cannon was running late. She dashed in through the waiting room entrance, but found the room was empty. "Is Gwen here yet?" she asked the receptionist. "Not yet." Gwen Littleton was alwa...
by daringnovelist
May 11th, 2010, 1:57 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Carpenter and the Sailor
Replies: 2
Views: 696

Re: The Carpenter and the Sailor

Good! Very vivid. I was actually drawn in, although in a few cases (some noted below) I felt there were problems with timing, and with the way you implied information that should be stated outright. Here are the thoughts I jotted down as I read: I'd like to see the line "Fray Pedro refrained from as...
by daringnovelist
May 10th, 2010, 12:58 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: The logistics of pen names
Replies: 7
Views: 1919

Re: The logistics of pen names

Pen names are common. There are a whole lot of good reasons for using a pen name, most of them logistical. (From issues like yours, to just wanting to keep their various genres clear from one another.) Most writers I know who use them don't bother with DBAs and legal paperwork. They just do business...
by daringnovelist
May 9th, 2010, 10:37 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Short excerpt from current literary fiction book
Replies: 4
Views: 1285

Re: Short excerpt from current literary fiction book

I like the story , that is the characters, their motivations and actions. (Especially her leaving the notebook - apparently as an offering?) Your writing voice is really quite nice too, but.... This is all summary, thoughts and feelings. I would really like to see more dialog and direct experience o...
by daringnovelist
May 9th, 2010, 1:01 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Grammar question
Replies: 4
Views: 903

Re: Grammar question

Pushed away, pulled on....

But as the person before me said, it depends on the voice whether that matters. Timing or emphasis may demand something else. (IMHO, a worse problem is the -ing word. Not "pushing" but "pushed.")

Camille
by daringnovelist
May 5th, 2010, 11:08 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What makes a person good?
Replies: 10
Views: 2113

Re: What makes a person good?

I don't know, I guess for me it goes back to something pretty simple, which I think of as my motto: Be brave, be fair, do good work. When a character strives for any of these things, I am drawn to them. All three, of course, is a good soul, even if they don't succeed fully. (Hmmm. This would be a go...
by daringnovelist
May 4th, 2010, 11:33 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Tools in your Writing Toolbox
Replies: 6
Views: 1236

Re: Tools in your Writing Toolbox

I've been thinking a lot about red herrings lately. They aren't just for mystery writers (although, since I'm writing a mystery, I'm thinking about them in that context too). Leading the protagonist - and audience - astray through misunderstandings can be a great way to lead to unexpected truths. Ca...
by daringnovelist
May 4th, 2010, 11:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Tips/techniques for formatting "pasted" query chapters
Replies: 10
Views: 1652

Re: Tips/techniques for formatting "pasted" query chapters

Oh whoops! I got mixed up and was thinking about the queries themselves, sorry. Indenting is fine for the sample, whatever works best. Okay, cool, so I wouldn't be shooting myself in the foot with that. (Phew.) It has been a while since I sent queries and I hope to start again this summer or fall. ...
by daringnovelist
May 3rd, 2010, 9:36 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Tips/techniques for formatting "pasted" query chapters
Replies: 10
Views: 1652

Re: Tips/techniques for formatting "pasted" query chapters

I would really advise against indents - they're just not standard for email and you never know how they're going to look in someone's email program. Block formatting is the way to go. Thanks! I've never used them in the query itself, only the writing samples. (I've been trading manuscripts that way...
by daringnovelist
May 3rd, 2010, 6:01 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Tips/techniques for formatting "pasted" query chapters
Replies: 10
Views: 1652

Re: Tips/techniques for formatting "pasted" query chapters

I tend to put in indents unless block style is mentioned in guidelines. I find the extra line of space between paragraphs in block style too disruptive with dialog. Generally, I put in five spaces at front of the paragraph for indent. I also use underscores before and after to indicate underlines, h...
by daringnovelist
May 3rd, 2010, 12:52 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Time to Fess Up - How Long Is It Taking You?
Replies: 48
Views: 11685

Re: Time to Fess Up - How Long Is It Taking You?

According to a survey by Tom Woll of Cross River Publishing, 2003, it takes an average of 475 hours for a present-day accomplished author to write a published fiction novel. A standard U.S. work-year is 2000 hours. That's absolutely shocking. That's not much over an hour per page total for all draf...
by daringnovelist
May 2nd, 2010, 8:59 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Use of suddenly
Replies: 12
Views: 2055

Re: Use of suddenly

I like the word "suddenly" so much, that when I was a kid, making up adventure stories about outlaws, I named my main character's horse "Suddenly." (True story. Strange name for a horse, but when I was even younger I named my favorite stuffed animal "Housie.") I try to eliminate it where I see it be...
by daringnovelist
May 2nd, 2010, 8:36 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: When Should You Feel Comfortable Calling Yourself a WRITER?
Replies: 20
Views: 7213

Re: When Should You Feel Comfortable Calling Yourself a WRITER?

You know, time just makes you feel more comfortable about anything. When I started writing I got into the Clarion Workshop in Science Fiction and Fantasy Writing WAY before I was ready. It was a fabulous and mind-blowing experience, but one problem was that I am not an sf or fantasy writer. I'm a my...