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by gilesth
January 7th, 2011, 2:34 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 345816

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

Today I wrote a review of the new Narnia movie.

High Aspirations: Movie Review: The Voyage of the Dawn Treader http://bit.ly/fsKu8X
by gilesth
January 5th, 2011, 6:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2525

Re: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

It seems like, maybe, there's too much information. I think these are the only things I absolutely NEED to know to understand why I'd want to read your book: Chris is a teenager (in our world, and dragons are secret - or in a similar world, where dragons and dragon slaying are common?). Chris is st...
by gilesth
January 5th, 2011, 4:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2525

Re: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

I like it. Feels like you lost some energy and hook in this version THOUGH it feels much cleaner and is a better query. I feel like you can clean it up and add just a bit more information to make it perfect. Good to know :D. I wasn't aware that I lost some of the hook, so I'll see what I can do to ...
by gilesth
January 5th, 2011, 2:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2525

Re: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

I've made some updates over the holiday. All comments are welcome :D Dear Agent, Life as a modern-day dragon slayer really is as cool as it sounds. At least that’s what Chris Drake believes when he turns sixteen and finishes his training. But two days after slaying his first dragon, he starts to gro...
by gilesth
January 5th, 2011, 1:06 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 345816

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

I just wrote a book review of Paranormalcy by Kiersten White. http://bit.ly/fpfG8Q
by gilesth
December 20th, 2010, 8:29 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2525

Re: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

Sounds like an exciting story with a really good conflict to keep the reader interested. I think the query is an amazingly good start! Here are my comments: Because you repeat the fact that Chris must choose sides, I deleted the first one and left the second as the closing 'dangler'. The part about...
by gilesth
December 17th, 2010, 9:13 am
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 345816

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

Today I share my thoughts on why word-counts shouldn't even be commented on when critiquing query letters.

High Aspirations: Stay on Topic http://gilesth.blogspot.com/2010/12/stay-on-topic.html
by gilesth
December 16th, 2010, 8:19 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: OVERBOARD - Revision #1 Posted
Replies: 12
Views: 2260

Re: OVERBOARD - 1st Person Query

The general rule among agents is that queries are to be written in third-person, present-tense. From what I understand, it's because at this point, you're marketing yourself and your writing style as much as you're marketing your book. Query Shark had some interesting things to say on the topic.
by gilesth
December 15th, 2010, 9:54 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2525

Re: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

You lost me a little by the end. My interpretation: In your world dragons are actually shape shifters? Chris has this ability but is only half dragon, but he's scared of his dad finding out because he'll be murdered. I'm guessing if Chris is half dragon then his dad should know, after all ... he wa...
by gilesth
December 15th, 2010, 8:39 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2525

YA Fantasy: WYRM FIEND, a new query

After revising my novel (based on feedback from many of the wonderful writers on this board :D) I've written a new query letter. Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated. Thanks :) Dear Agent, Chris Drake is a dragon slayer with a driver’s license. Shortly after slaying his first dragon, though, ...
by gilesth
December 15th, 2010, 8:36 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEMOIRS OF DANIEL: THE FALLEN (Fantasy)
Replies: 6
Views: 1472

Re: MEMOIRS OF DANIEL: THE FALLEN (Fantasy)

I have to agree with chris13. It feels like a synopsis. Sound fascinating, but this letter is wordy. Try to cut the word count in half, focus on the most important plot points, and then show us what they are :) You put in a lot of work, and I'd request pages based on what I read here (if I was an ag...
by gilesth
December 13th, 2010, 9:33 am
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 345816

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

I wrote a long post about how characters make a story great. I personally think that well-written characters are as important as a good writer, and way more important than a witty narrator.

High Aspirations: Characters make the story http://gilesth.blogspot.com/2010/12/cha ... story.html
by gilesth
December 10th, 2010, 2:29 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 345816

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

I wrote a post about why audio books are a great way to get in some "reading" you might not otherwise get in.

High Aspirations: Audio Books http://gilesth.blogspot.com/2010/12/audio-books.html
by gilesth
December 7th, 2010, 9:15 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE ELITE (YA) -revised!
Replies: 29
Views: 4662

Re: THE ELITE (YA)

16-year-old Avery Hunter thinks she might finally have - this is sounds awkward to me. Perhaps try it without "finally" found her place in the world when she finds because you already have the word "found" in this sentense, "finds" sounds repetative. I recommend "discovers" out that she has eccentr...
by gilesth
December 6th, 2010, 9:16 am
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 345816

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

I just spent some time reminiscing on why I like Christmas music and decorating my home for the holiday. http://gilesth.blogspot.com/2010/12/chr ... music.html