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by JaEvans
March 27th, 2010, 12:49 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Have we talked about world building?
Replies: 10
Views: 2965

Re: Have we talked about world building?

I have to agree with r louis scott and others. The novel I have posted the query for in the feedback forum is set in the eighteenth century (England, France, America, and Canada). I did my research and got a good sense of language, ship construction, industries, etc. But the thing is, as I write I w...
by JaEvans
March 26th, 2010, 6:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Guidelines for Posting Queries
Replies: 39
Views: 56736

Re: Guidelines for Posting Queries or Excerpts From Your Work

I am guilty as charged Quil. On my post I did that with three things in mind. 1) I did not want people mistaking the first as the new one. 2) expedience so as not to waist people's time. 3) I know that the original is in the threads below with peoples comments so I thought people could read it there...
by JaEvans
March 26th, 2010, 12:48 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Approaching an agent who..
Replies: 3
Views: 963

Re: Approaching an agent who..

I find this one tricky. If you say some sappy stuff you sound like a sap. If you don't say anything then you have not stroked their ego's enough. I usually acknowledge that the agent represents my genre and I feel that my novel fits well with works they have already managed. I am not too sure what e...
by JaEvans
March 26th, 2010, 12:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Critique - Overcast Shadows - First Try
Replies: 27
Views: 3892

Re: Query Critique - Overcast Shadows - First Try

I have not been commenting but I have been reading the posts. Your revisions are fantastic. I like this version but there are two spots that I found myself thinking about. I have highlighted them below. Dear Agent, Vitiosus is the prince of the Lasserta, a nation of cold-hearted beings striving for ...
by JaEvans
March 25th, 2010, 12:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Critique - The Potter's Daughter - Revision 5
Replies: 26
Views: 3221

Re: Query Critique - The Potter's Daughter - Revision 5

I am having a time of it getting my query off the ground as well so I do not propose to have the answers. Abby Bellen is an art curator at one of the world’s premier museums and has a happy fulfilling life in the city. When Abby receives a call that her father Will needs help she reluctantly returns...
by JaEvans
March 21st, 2010, 11:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revision number six
Replies: 31
Views: 5789

New Query Letter. Please comment. Thanks.

Dear Great Agent, Deeply hidden away in another dimension of existence lies a spiritual realm entrusted with balancing the forces of light and darkness within the universe. This realm is on the verge of being tipped into perpetual darkness and Jonathan Cornwallis, a free spirited nineteen year old b...
by JaEvans
March 20th, 2010, 10:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revision number six
Replies: 31
Views: 5789

Query number three is now up. Thanks all for the help

Hi Shadow and everyone that has been helping. I really appreciate all your comments and help. Here is my third installment. Please feel free to be blunt. These things are so hard to get right and so much more difficult without accurate feedback. You guys have no idea how helpful you have been. This ...
by JaEvans
March 20th, 2010, 1:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revision number six
Replies: 31
Views: 5789

Re: Query has been revised. Please comment.

Thank you Erica75, Below is a tiny revision in the sense that I moved the paragraph order and I added something about Anne. I guess I am stuck on the 190,000 words because my novel is like two in one. In the novel Jonathan journeys to find his lost father while discovering that he is a "Dritan", des...
by JaEvans
March 20th, 2010, 12:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Formatting
Replies: 6
Views: 1015

Re: Query Formatting

Thanks for that Erica75. I think that is what it is. Rather than misleading it is possible that there are just that many variations in what agents want. You write a single query letter but it really needs to be customized for each agent depending on what there specific variances are.

Jason
by JaEvans
March 19th, 2010, 10:25 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Favorite quote
Replies: 55
Views: 9713

Re: Favorite quote

"life is a tragedy for those who feel, but a comedy for those who think" - Horace Walpole
by JaEvans
March 19th, 2010, 10:23 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Olympics Discussion, Anyone?
Replies: 7
Views: 1328

Re: Olympics Discussion, Anyone?

I am glad Canada won since I am Canadian as is hockey. What I don't get is that hockey is a very exciting game, skill wise, yet a lot of US games are played in half empty stadiums. It is taking a long time to catch on in the US even though American teams have won a heck of a lot of Stanley Cups (the...
by JaEvans
March 19th, 2010, 10:10 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: 'Fess Up
Replies: 14
Views: 2683

Re: 'Fess Up

For me it is two hours an evening when my wife has gone to sleep. I love to write but with five kids I have to work my writing time around the needs of the family. On the weekends I tend to write more like five hours each day. I would love to do it eight hours a day but must do the day job.
by JaEvans
March 19th, 2010, 1:11 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Does your MS go up or down in size?
Replies: 36
Views: 8597

Re: Does your MS go up or down in size?

I think my problem is being able to condense. My MS started at 169,000 and after two careful revisions is sitting at 190,000. When I look it over I do not see any waisted space which makes it difficult to condense. I know there are many 200,000 books out there but not often first works. Now I have t...
by JaEvans
March 19th, 2010, 1:05 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Glad I Didn't Give Up
Replies: 13
Views: 2107

Re: Glad I Didn't Give Up

Congrats.
by JaEvans
March 19th, 2010, 1:00 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: March Madness!!!
Replies: 125
Views: 31135

Re: March Madness!!!

Not to knock basketball but eh... I am Canadian, and we did just win the 2010 Olympic Gold in ice hockey. So I have to say that hockey, in my opinion, is the best sport out there. Maybe I could agree that basketball is equal with hockey but we lost our team from Vancouver a few years back. It was th...