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by oldhousejunkie
September 6th, 2010, 3:09 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you write?
Replies: 12
Views: 1514

How do you write?

While I have been working on my MS for ten years, I have just now ventured into the world of writing forums. Being exposed to other writers and their quirks has been great, but one thing I have noticed is that a lot of writers have multiple drafts of their MS. I don't and have begun to wonder if I a...
by oldhousejunkie
September 6th, 2010, 2:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Plot or Character - Which Comes First?
Replies: 35
Views: 7974

Re: Plot or Character - Which Comes First?

I guess the time period comes first with me since I write historical fiction. With my nearly completed MS, I started with the main character. She has very specific traits so it was easy to build the plot and other characters from there. With my shelved WIP, I developed the plot and the character sim...
by oldhousejunkie
September 6th, 2010, 2:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for The During Time, a work of women's fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 1005

Re: Query for The During Time, a work of women's fiction

Hmmm.... First, this doesn't strike me as a work of women's fiction simply because the main protag is a man. I even googled the definition of "women's fiction" and it seemed to me that the protag is usually a woman. This seems more like a fantasy or maybe....paranormal because of the while telepathi...
by oldhousejunkie
September 5th, 2010, 5:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4810

Re: Final (I hope) WHAT A PAINE! Query See page 2

Wow--you've done a great job of revising since my last read through. I finally have a sense of what your story is about. Good job! My only comment is to drop the Twiligh reference. In fact, I preferred the first paragraph of the revision immediately before this one. You're almost there--keep pluggin...
by oldhousejunkie
September 3rd, 2010, 3:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: new WHAT A PAINE! query page 3
Replies: 32
Views: 4810

Re: Big Changes WHAT A PAINE! Query

You're going to hate me but I don't think this is an improvement. I think you spent valuable space telling the agent that the book is fun, hip, zany, etc. and did very little to show the agent. Dear Agent, My novel, WHAT A PAINE!, is a quick-moving, kooky urban fantasy novel with a women’s fiction f...
by oldhousejunkie
September 2nd, 2010, 6:47 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Teenage Writers?
Replies: 47
Views: 13066

Re: Teenage Writers?

I started writing when I was in elementary school. As time progresses, I got busier. It's been 10 years since I graduated high school, and the only time I was too stressed to write was my senior year. I really ramped up my writing in college. I worked part-time, but I always found time for writing. ...
by oldhousejunkie
September 2nd, 2010, 6:22 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft
Replies: 10
Views: 2377

Re: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft

For the timeline, I was just thinking she's at least two months (and you say four) by the time she meets Richard (ie. is physically where he is). So that means when she gives birth she's only been around him five months so in order to realistically claim the baby as his, he'd need to say it was bor...
by oldhousejunkie
September 2nd, 2010, 1:22 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
Replies: 22
Views: 5147

Re: REVISED Synopsis - Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)

First off, I <3 time travel love stories. I am a huge fan of that Meg Ryan/Hugh Jackman film "Kate and Leopold" that came out a couple of years ago. I started writing a time travel story myself back in high school, but it never stuck. I'm not going to do a line-by-line edit because that's not my thi...
by oldhousejunkie
September 2nd, 2010, 11:49 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft
Replies: 10
Views: 2377

Re: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within

Also, I noticed two things that raised questions. One - if I understand correctly from the synopsis, her twin's name was Julian Landry, she takes that name/persona as her alias, Alex tracks her by finding enlistment papers for Julian (her brother) and mistaking them for her? That's a cool idea, but...
by oldhousejunkie
September 1st, 2010, 10:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Figments - YA Urban Fantasy Query
Replies: 5
Views: 992

Re: Figments - YA Urban Fantasy Query

Ok, I can't make sa line by line edit because I'm stuck on my Blackberry. But I am going to echo the sentiments of the other posters. First, I didn't get a sense of Krista. Just that she dreams a lot. Like the other poster mentioned, how did you go from talking about her father dying to her drooling...
by oldhousejunkie
September 1st, 2010, 2:09 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Does this plot need reworking?
Replies: 11
Views: 2370

Re: Does this plot need reworking?

I jumped past all of the comments because I had a semi-brilliant idea that I wanted to get down. When I was reading what you could and could not take out... Keep the affair, I thought that tied everyone together nicely. Does the DA find out about the affair and threaten Roland with the evidence? Kee...
by oldhousejunkie
September 1st, 2010, 1:14 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft
Replies: 10
Views: 2377

Re: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within

Ok, here is the revised version. I got it down to three pages, double spaced. I hope it clears up some confusion. I think it flows better (now that my brain is working a little better today)... Comments are appreciated as always! Julienne Dalton is nineteen in the summer of 1862 when her twin broth...
by oldhousejunkie
August 31st, 2010, 10:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Redemption - YA Fantasy - Third time's the charm?
Replies: 11
Views: 1588

Re: Query: Redemption - YA Fantasy

Good first try. I won't make many comments because I'm viewing on my Blackberry. But I will say a few things. First your opening was great. The first sentence really grabbed my attention but then it kind of devolved into the multiple POV thing. Like ElfSpirit said, try to pick your main character an...
by oldhousejunkie
August 31st, 2010, 9:01 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft
Replies: 10
Views: 2377

Re: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within

Thanks JadePhoenix! Your comments were the focus I needed. My brain was on overload, but I felt like I needed to get it out there. I definitely liked your ending better. :-)
by oldhousejunkie
August 31st, 2010, 6:21 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft
Replies: 10
Views: 2377

SYNOPSIS: The Enemy Within 2nd Draft

09/01: Second draft below. Everyone was so helpful over on the query page that I thought I would continue the madness by drafting a synopsis. It's a mess, I tell you. It comes in at just over four pages, double spaced. What amazes me is that I drafted a one page synopsis a few months agao, and now ...