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by oldhousejunkie
October 20th, 2010, 1:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take
Replies: 7
Views: 1205

Re: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take

Just my two cents, but if you have a query that got that many positive responses STICK WITH IT. DITTO. Wow. Do you mean that you might have changed a few things when you tightened up the manuscript so your original query doesn't necessarily reflect those changes? IMO, just tweak the original if tha...
by oldhousejunkie
October 19th, 2010, 9:15 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query
Replies: 28
Views: 4504

Re: A Lullaby- YA paranormal romance query

Priya, Well first off, stop trying to so hard. I sense that you might be working yourself into a frenzy trying to get this right. I do think that the query seems unfocused. It is a bit on the long side, and I think there is too much back story. You need to find a way to convey the plot line but not ...
by oldhousejunkie
October 19th, 2010, 8:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take
Replies: 7
Views: 1205

Re: I WOULD HAVE LOVED YOU ANYWAY, New take

I agree with the last poster about Presley seeming kind of vapid. Or at least obsessed with the past. And I won't even get into the fact that it reads like she's just sitting around, waiting to get slaughtered. Also, I think this query reads too much like a synopsis. It's too long, and a not very in...
by oldhousejunkie
October 1st, 2010, 9:05 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: What's your favorite song that tells a story?
Replies: 58
Views: 15014

Re: What's your favorite song that tells a story?

At first I was going to go with the Killer's trilogy of songs that follow a relationship that breaks up over an infidelity and ends in murder: "Jenny was a Friend of Mine", "Midnight Show", and "Leave the Whiskey on the Shelf." BUT... I thought about "Intervention" by Arcade Fire and "Sometime Aroun...
by oldhousejunkie
September 29th, 2010, 12:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1851

Re: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query

Excellent turn-around! I'm sure there are some nit-picky things in there that you'll want to change (word choice, phrasing, etc.) but otherwise, this looks good! Congrats and best of luck to you. Your comments are all helpful and I thank you very much for the time you have put in to reading my query...
by oldhousejunkie
September 29th, 2010, 12:43 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE REMEDY - 3rd try at page 2 bottom - Women's Fiction
Replies: 20
Views: 3562

Re: THE REMEDY - Query - Women's upmarket fiction

You're not screwed. You might have to work a little longer to get some of that across. Sounds like you've got a story that's plenty unique and special, and that can be tough to condense. I'm sure you can do it. Work in some of the stuff you just posted there. Agreed. You're not screwed. You're here...
by oldhousejunkie
September 29th, 2010, 12:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY- YA Mystery- Mad as a Hatter
Replies: 30
Views: 4113

Re: QUERY- YA Mystery- Mad as a Hatter

This is getting better, but I'm still questioning why Emil is sent to live with Corwin. I feel like there is more to the story here. Was Corwin the officer in charge of Emil's kidnapping? Why would his mother be concerned for him simply because there's a murderer rampaging London? A murderer that's ...
by oldhousejunkie
September 29th, 2010, 11:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL
Replies: 9
Views: 1410

Re: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL

GeeGee-- Thanks for the compliment on my blog. It's all my outlet for all of my randomness. I'm still shocked that I have followers. :-) Writing queries is so difficult...it took me a solid two weeks to whip my into shape. And while most of the feedback here is good, it's hard to sort through all of...
by oldhousejunkie
September 27th, 2010, 3:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL
Replies: 9
Views: 1410

Re: QUERY - SPIRIT HILL- revision posted

Hello fellow historic fiction writer! Thanks to everyone. NOW I remember why I dislike writing queries. I cannot summarize to save my soul. Anyway, here goes another try: It's the spring of 1938. Gus Kelman lives with his wife, Rebecca, and their son on a remote farm in Saskatchewan, a Canadian prov...
by oldhousejunkie
September 27th, 2010, 3:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query
Replies: 11
Views: 1851

Re: FADING GREY - A Paranormal Romance Query

I am an unpublished writer seeking a literary agent. FADING GREY is a 90,000 word paranormal romance. You REALLY need to move this to the end. See Janet Reid's "Query Shark" blog. She rants all the time about people who do this. And once again, do not say that you are an unpublished writer. It's a ...
by oldhousejunkie
September 22nd, 2010, 1:10 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you write?
Replies: 12
Views: 1512

Re: How do you write?

SierraMcConnell, I totally feel you on the skipping to get to the good bits. That's where I am now. My beta told me that I lost a good chance for character development because I skipped forward. So now I'm back and re-writing those parts. The reason that I got so insecure was that one of my betas as...
by oldhousejunkie
September 18th, 2010, 8:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG historical novel, query revised
Replies: 25
Views: 4083

Re: MG historical novel, query revised

Excellent! Love the new-and-improved, much shorter version!

Good luck to you!
by oldhousejunkie
September 16th, 2010, 11:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG historical novel, query revised
Replies: 25
Views: 4083

Re: MG historical novel, query revised

Sorry I ended abruptly. Bloody Blackberry was giving me fits!

Anyway I just wanted to say good luck to you, and I hope to hear more about your progress.
by oldhousejunkie
September 16th, 2010, 10:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG historical novel, query revised
Replies: 25
Views: 4083

Re: MG historical novel, query revised

Great concept...but I'm bias since my current MS is set during the Civil War. I agree with a lot of WhipSlip's comments. I know that some earlier posters said more detail, but. I think there is too much. You have to strike the right balance-- detail the right things. You absolutely need to trim this...
by oldhousejunkie
September 16th, 2010, 9:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY- YA Mystery- Mad as a Hatter
Replies: 30
Views: 4113

Re: QUERY- YA Mystery- Mad as a Hatter

Glad that you dropped the "Marquis" part. It took me several read throughs to figure out that you meant "marquis" the aristocratic title. I thought it was his name at first! In general, English aristocrats were addressed as "Lord" So-in-So, Marquis of So-in-So. Just a random tidbit from a anglophile...