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by slavandria
January 4th, 2011, 11:57 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for YA/New Adult Fantasy Critique Partner
Replies: 5
Views: 1807

Re: Looking for YA/New Adult Fantasy Critique Partner

that would be great! I only have the first 12 chapters that have been revised. my e-mail is kford2007@gmail.com. We can exchange info there.

Your comments are exactly what I am looking for as your age group is the one I'm targeting. I couldn't have asked for a better partner!

Jen
by slavandria
January 3rd, 2011, 12:44 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Time
Replies: 9
Views: 2502

Re: The Time

Hi Hannah: I just saw your review on my blog site! Thank you, so much. I replied to your response if you want to take a look. I hope you signed up for the blog and please feel free to leave comments, introduce yourself, etc. on the site under the community page. Again, thank you so much for taking t...
by slavandria
January 3rd, 2011, 9:51 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Time
Replies: 9
Views: 2502

Re: The Time

awesome! And, you are in the right age group I need to review my novel. Perfecto! Have a super day!
by slavandria
January 3rd, 2011, 9:15 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Time
Replies: 9
Views: 2502

Re: The Time

Initially when I was writing I had no plan, but now I'm nearing the end I know all the details, so I could add in another scene to the beginning, either when Teri shoots Carter or the scene before she is kidnapped, however initially I had been wanting the nature of Teris and Carters relationship to ...
by slavandria
January 2nd, 2011, 4:49 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for YA/New Adult Fantasy Critique Partner
Replies: 5
Views: 1807

Looking for YA/New Adult Fantasy Critique Partner

I'm in my final revision (until I get additional feedback) of my YA/NA fantasy novel, In the Shadow of the Dragon King. Would love some feedback from anyone interested. Right now, I only have the first 12 chapters ready for review. If you are interested, please let me know. Synopsis: A secret allian...
by slavandria
January 2nd, 2011, 12:54 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Time
Replies: 9
Views: 2502

Re: The Time

wow, Hannah. I just read your WIP and I think you have a very interesting concept that with some tweaking could really turn into a really great read. I like the tension you've created with Teri and Carter and Wills. You've set up the issues with them to the point the reader wants to know what happen...
by slavandria
November 20th, 2010, 9:16 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writing Fight Scenes
Replies: 15
Views: 3975

Re: Writing Fight Scenes

Robin, I struggled with the same problem as you until I read the novels by Raymond Feist, and then it all became too clear what I'd been doing wrong. I don't know what sort of stories you write, but I'm sure you can look at what he does, draw inspiration from it and incorporate your own style and ve...
by slavandria
November 19th, 2010, 11:27 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Query Critique Friday 11/19/10
Replies: 11
Views: 12962

Re: Query Critique Friday 11/19/10

Great post, Holly, and I completely agree. You took the words away from me. :-) I, too, would change Candida's name. If you like the sound of it, then perhaps the name Cantita or Castida or something like that to get the image of a cheesy yeast infection out of the reader's mind. I can't really add ...
by slavandria
November 16th, 2010, 9:46 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Excerpt of The Devil You Don't Know
Replies: 6
Views: 2295

Re: Excerpt of The Devil You Don't Know

Thanks for posting your work, Terry. I always love reading the works of new authors. I think you have a great premise for the novel. I like the idea of only these people hearing the explosion when no one around them does, and the mystery of it makes me want to read more to find out why they are the ...
by slavandria
November 16th, 2010, 8:59 am
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 618
Views: 194205

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hi, Craig! Nice to meet you. I live in Florida and love to write anything that comes to mind, which is usually fantasy or paranormal stuff. I am a published author (just a short story in an upcoming anthology, but hey, it's a start. :-)) I am currently writing an YA/NA fantasy novel entitled In the ...
by slavandria
August 25th, 2010, 9:49 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Editing Term
Replies: 2
Views: 541

Re: Editing Term

Thank you, polymath! I think I have my answer...:-)
by slavandria
August 24th, 2010, 1:36 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Editing Term
Replies: 2
Views: 541

Editing Term

I have been asked to edit a novel for a friend and he wants to give me credit in the book he is self-publishing. He sent me an email asking me how I want my editorial credit to read and where I would like it to appear. Not to appear stupid, but I really don't know the answer to this. Can anyone tell...
by slavandria
July 21st, 2010, 2:00 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Who has read your WIP?
Replies: 22
Views: 3717

Re: Who has read your WIP?

I have posted the opening chapter of my WIP to a writer's site out of the UK and have received amazing feedback, including a professional critique from an editor with Orion Books. Her comments were VERY positive and encouraging and I have since incorporated her ideas in my novel. I must say my ms is...
by slavandria
July 9th, 2010, 10:14 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283448

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: In the Shadow of the Dragon King Genre: YA Fantasy Word Count: 249 David Heiland pushed through the balcony doors just as four F-22 Raptors screamed overhead and disappeared over the Tennessee Mountains. “Yes!” he said, punching the early morning air. “That’s freaking awesome!” He ran back in...