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by kenpochick
March 27th, 2010, 8:45 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)
Replies: 36
Views: 5596

Re: Query- Isabella Vampirella

Ok. So I just went to a baby name site and found a page with 185 names that ended with -ella. :-) They also had different spellings for Isabella so the sound would stay the same but it would separate it from THAT Bella. Ysabella or Izabella. I kind of like the Y spelling. What do you think? Is it en...
by kenpochick
March 27th, 2010, 8:21 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: First request for a full MS... rejected
Replies: 22
Views: 3043

Re: First request for a full MS... rejected

Hang in there. Your query sounds really interesting and I would definitely pick it up in a bookstore. Plus his rejection sounded very complimentary so I'm sure it's just a matter of time.
by kenpochick
March 27th, 2010, 8:11 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)
Replies: 36
Views: 5596

Re: Query- Isabella Vampirella

Yeah, I wondered if Isabella would get referenced to Twilight. I only picked it because it rhymes. I named her older sister Annabella. I'm hoping that because they call her Bella (in Twilight) so much that maybe Isabella would lose it's Twilight connotation? I may have to change that though. The Jun...
by kenpochick
March 26th, 2010, 3:06 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Protocol for submitting a partial
Replies: 4
Views: 1045

Re: Protocol for submitting a partial

I believe you're supposed to put it as an attachment since email screws up formatting. Plus I just read on another agent's blog that if it's an attachement they can send it to their kindle as opposed to an email which can only be read as an email. I would say in the body though that it was requested...
by kenpochick
March 26th, 2010, 9:13 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)
Replies: 36
Views: 5596

Re: Query- Isabella Vampirella

Thank you so much for the replies guys. I will definitely incorporate those changes. I was one of those kids that was obsessed with vampires and the like when I was young and my only real option was Bunicula (which was awesome). Now that I have my own kids I've looked around and although vampires ar...
by kenpochick
March 25th, 2010, 4:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Folklore
Replies: 29
Views: 4232

Re: Query: Folklore

Wow, your query has gotten much better!

I just have a couple of questions.

If Beau's mom is the mayor, why are they after him? Did he do something to rebel?

What is the curse and how do they break it?

I think if you answer those questions it would help.

Great job!
by kenpochick
March 25th, 2010, 4:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Critique my query please! "Blown to Smithereens"
Replies: 6
Views: 1161

Re: Critique my query please! "Blown to Smithereens"

You've gotten some good feedback but I would also include what genre of book it is and how long. I can't really tell by reading your query if this is a romance or if it's a thriller with romance in it?
by kenpochick
March 25th, 2010, 4:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)
Replies: 36
Views: 5596

Query- Isabella Vampirella (EVIL EDITOR response at end)

Hello all, I admit I've been mostly a lurker so I'm throwing myself at your mercy to critique my query. Thanks in advance! Dear Agent, Isabella just knows her life will be perfect once she finally gets her fangs! Isabella is eight years old and thrilled to be starting the third grade with her friend...
by kenpochick
March 12th, 2010, 4:41 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: CEDRIC (MG Fantasy)
Replies: 12
Views: 2621

Re: CEDRIC- Chapter 1 (MG Fantasy)

That's adorable! I would definitely keep reading.