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by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 10:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: A BROKEN MIRROR -- new query
Replies: 15
Views: 2689

Re: A BROKEN MIRROR -- new query

I like it best with the first paragraph dropped, and "until now, apparently." from the second sentence cut. That's really all I see. It's quite clean. :)
by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 9:09 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: THE LAST DRAGON (fantasy)
Replies: 12
Views: 1884

Re: QUERY: THE LAST DRAGON (fantasy)

I can't resist critiquing this. I love young adult fiction, and your plot line reached in and grabbed me. I can tell it's the sort of book I'd rush to the counter to buy. Nadine’s sheltered and ordinary life changes when a letter from the king arrives requesting that she be present at the Embers Bal...
by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 7:57 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Good Books - Bad Endings
Replies: 39
Views: 6249

Re: Good Books - Bad Endings

I haven't allowed myself to be burned since the Animorphs series when I was in my tweens. I hated the last book so bad I dragged the whole series outside and barbequed them. The only more satisfying destruction I could have given that series is if I'd been able to hold that barbeque on the author's ...
by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 7:53 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Double Narrative Structure
Replies: 19
Views: 5767

Re: Double Narrative Structure

Also The Valley of Horses By Jean Auel used a double narrative. I can think of several that pulled it off successfully, now that I stop to think about it. The trick is to be sure your POV changes don't confuse the reader. Best way to find out for sure is to write it, give it to someone who will be h...
by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 7:36 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Does your MS go up or down in size?
Replies: 36
Views: 9019

Re: Does your MS go up or down in size?

IHmm, I wonder if my work would read stronger without "that." I'll have to check my work. Thanks for the details. ^^
by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 9:52 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Does your MS go up or down in size?
Replies: 36
Views: 9019

Re: Does your MS go up or down in size?

Interesting, haven't heard of removing "that". What do you replace it with, or do you just cut it and don't add anything, like I often do with adverbs?
by A.M.Kuska
March 9th, 2010, 9:49 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Science Fiction Query
Replies: 4
Views: 1063

Re: Science Fiction Query

Hello Cole, I'm very impressed with how well you take criticism. I've read through this thread, and what I see are some fabulous critiques, and a writer handling those critiques with style. That doesn't happen often enough. I don't have much to offer you aside from what others have said, but I just ...
by A.M.Kuska
March 8th, 2010, 9:46 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: What writing disorder do you suffer from?
Replies: 49
Views: 11284

Re: What writing disorder do you suffer from?

Obesity. I like words. A lot. I like to gorge myself on them until the novel gets fat and bloated…currently I am editing, and desperately trying to get my novel to go on a diet. I supervise the words it eats, but I suspect it binges on adverbs and passive voice while I am asleep. *headdesk* We shou...
by A.M.Kuska
March 8th, 2010, 9:35 pm
Forum: Town Hall
Topic: The Introduction Thread
Replies: 618
Views: 197899

Re: The Introduction Thread

Hello everyone. :) Since we seem to be exposing our day lives here, I'll confess to being a dog groomer. I've written one novel made up entirely of garbage, and am currently editing my second one which I think will be publishable. I have four short stories published, and a successful noveling blog. ...
by A.M.Kuska
March 8th, 2010, 7:40 pm
Forum: Self-Publishing
Topic: Are eBooks already over the hill?
Replies: 6
Views: 1351

Re: Are eBooks already over the hill?

I serialized my 2006 NaNoWriMo novel online in order to build a readership. I've got well over 1,000 readers now, and the list keeps climbing. Given my hits, my subscription list, my followers on twitter and the comments that pour in as each new chapter comes out, I'm pretty confident in the enjoyab...
by A.M.Kuska
March 8th, 2010, 7:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: Playing God
Replies: 8
Views: 1972

Re: QUERY: Playing God

Hello SteveShakespeare, I'm very excited about your query letter, and the storyline you're representing here. I got a good clear idea of what the story was about, and of your writing skills. I'm impressed with both. Below are my thoughts on your query, paragraph by paragraph. Please understand that ...
by A.M.Kuska
March 8th, 2010, 7:08 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: TWILIGHT - thoughts?
Replies: 107
Views: 26033

Re: TWILIGHT - thoughts?

When the online quiz site Quizilla was still privately owned, vampire stories used to be popular. I used to read them from time to time. Frankly, it was these stories that made me take my hat off to Stephenie Meyer when I read her first book. I have not read any of her other books, I'm flatly uninte...
by A.M.Kuska
March 8th, 2010, 6:57 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Does your MS go up or down in size?
Replies: 36
Views: 9019

Re: Does your MS go up or down in size?

I'm not sure if it's too late to respond to this post, but I also share the problem of low word count. My solution was to buy a couple of books by Donald Maass, Writing the Breakout Novel , and the accompanying handbook. I can't praise these two books enough, and the workbook makes a huge difference...