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by bronwyn1
April 13th, 2010, 7:11 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: New Ideas Interrupting Current Work
Replies: 19
Views: 6271

Re: New Ideas Interrupting Current Work

I get those all the time! Like now I'm supposed to be editing my completed MS but then I got two really excellent other novel ideas. And so I took a break from editing and started to write them both. Now I have writer's block on both of the incomplete ideas, so it's back to working on the complete M...
by bronwyn1
April 13th, 2010, 7:08 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query (Revised 2x) - YA
Replies: 12
Views: 1975

Re: Query (Revised 2x) - YA

Okay, so I sort of took a break from the online universe for writers and so this is what I came up with for a query: Dear Agent, Pretty, popular and privileged, Clara Vargas Leighton is the picture of young, aristocratic, propriety in 1980s Chile. But Clara was born with a questioning nature that de...
by bronwyn1
March 19th, 2010, 1:35 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Action, anyone?
Replies: 23
Views: 4140

Re: Action, anyone?

I'm having sort of the same problem. The only real "action" comes at the very end of my first chapter (which I guess is good in a way because it makes people want to read on), but at the same time, I've received a few comments that the rest of the chapter before the action-filled last part is boring...
by bronwyn1
March 17th, 2010, 9:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revision number six
Replies: 31
Views: 5861

Re: I don't know if I am on the right track... Please Comment.

Dear Agent: Hello. I’m looking for an agent to represent my book, Jonathan Cornwallis and the World of Light and Shadow, complete at 190,000-words. I have also just begun the sequel, Jonathan Cornwallis and the Order of Viata If I had to encapsulate my book in a few sentences it would be this: -Mov...
by bronwyn1
March 16th, 2010, 11:51 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Replies: 21
Views: 6729

Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?

A critique partner would be amazing. Because the only things in my town that bear any semblance to writer's groups are for non-fiction only (my own life is not interesting enough for me to write non-fiction about it). And everyone else I know (i.e. my mother) would just be like "Everything you write...
by bronwyn1
March 15th, 2010, 5:37 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Are you appealing to your target audience?
Replies: 26
Views: 4192

Re: Are you appealing to your target audience?

i was having trouble with my audience. my ms is absolutely adult fiction-- it's very dark, deals with adult issues and has a rough ending. the characters, though, are teenagers and so i kept hearing from people who were reading the query/first 10 pages or so that they thought it was young adult. i ...
by bronwyn1
March 13th, 2010, 5:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query (Revised 2x) - YA
Replies: 12
Views: 1975

Re: Query Practice (YA novel)

Matthew, I have looked at your blog and I really like it! I think it's very informative and I wish you the best of luck (I hope at least one of those 100 agents you're querying will request your MS). Yeah, I was originally really on the fence about making this a YA book, but some other people on ano...
by bronwyn1
March 12th, 2010, 10:20 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Worst Query Competition
Replies: 29
Views: 5177

Re: Worst Query Competition

I'm bored, so I'm writing another terrible query! Attention Sir or Madam, Today in this note, I wish to delightfully inform you of my Young Adult Middle Grade Crime Thriller Horror Sci-Fi Fantasy Fiction Novel. It is entitled REVENGE OF THE HEART and it is now currently 800,000 words long (but I am ...
by bronwyn1
March 12th, 2010, 10:03 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: The importance (and difficulty) of gestures
Replies: 55
Views: 24825

Re: The importance (and difficulty) of gestures

I totally rely on gesture crutches (and in my revisions, I'm trying to remove them, but at the same time, still keeping the emotional context of the situation). You're right, it does get repetitive and even annoying to see all the characters sighing and rolling their eyes all the time. Another probl...
by bronwyn1
March 10th, 2010, 10:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query (Revised 2x) - YA
Replies: 12
Views: 1975

Re: Query Practice (YA novel)

Okay, so here's query take two. I hope I took everyone's advice (I tried to). Now I'm worried it's too long, but... Dear [Agent], Clara Moreno has the pieces of the puzzle. She just doesn’t know how to put them together. The mumblings of her classmate Edwin against the dictatorship of Augusto Pinoch...
by bronwyn1
March 10th, 2010, 8:18 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query (Revised 2x) - YA
Replies: 12
Views: 1975

Re: Query Practice (YA novel)

Thank you both for all of your really helpful critiques and comments! As I let the novel simmer, I'll continue to work on the query letter (I hope that isn't strange or anything). Since I am still in high school (though graduating this May and starting college in August), I don't have a degree or an...
by bronwyn1
March 10th, 2010, 4:38 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 41333

Re: Share your opening sentence!

Here's mine:

"The display above the chalkboard continued to draw Clara’s attention away from her Algebra problems."

It's nothing special, but I hope it's conflict-y enough as a starter (but not in the whole car-chase and bombing kind of way).
by bronwyn1
March 9th, 2010, 10:56 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: You Know You're a Writer When...
Replies: 26
Views: 4981

Re: You Know You're a Writer When...

I make soundtracks too. With covers in photoshop. I also make book covers for my novels in photoshop as well
by bronwyn1
March 9th, 2010, 10:36 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query (Revised 2x) - YA
Replies: 12
Views: 1975

Query (Revised 2x) - YA

Revised version #2 posted down thread Now I know that I am not ready to begin querying (I need to do like 8+ more revisions before the novel is *perfect* and honestly, I'm still on the high that comes with finishing a novel you don't think is complete crap when you finish it), but I want to know if...
by bronwyn1
March 9th, 2010, 8:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: Literary fiction/comic novel
Replies: 4
Views: 1205

Re: QUERY: Literary fiction/comic novel

I like the idea of your book (it personally appeals to me, lol I love the 'Smokey the Bear' part), but I essentially agree with most of the previous comments. Always put your word count into a query. It's practically a requirement if you don't want a standard form rejection. And 200,000 is way too l...