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by FK7
July 13th, 2010, 7:51 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Bengal kitten pictures!
Replies: 13
Views: 5026

Re: Bengal kitten pictures!

You're not suppose to give any kittens away before 10-12 weeks... and after three months, I'm 100% sure Maya will be fed up with them. It'll be harder for us I reckon ;)
by FK7
July 13th, 2010, 10:26 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Thanks so much Bron :D
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 11:52 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Bengal kitten pictures!
Replies: 13
Views: 5026

Bengal kitten pictures!

Tonight at 7:15PM, our F7 marbled Bengal began the delivery of quadruplets. http://www.franciscossette.com/img/Maya/Maya1.jpg http://www.franciscossette.com/img/Maya/Maya2.jpg http://www.franciscossette.com/img/Maya/Maya3.jpg http://www.franciscossette.com/img/Maya/Maya4.jpg It was the first animal ...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 10:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Based on your invaluable advice (and some on another forum), this is the final version I'm going with. In blue is what I changed from 2nd version Bioengineer Gabriel Clarkson is a cappuccino addict and self-declared workaholic. He's spent the last five years in his Vermont lab developing a virus mea...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 2:09 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

The reason I talk about the break-in, murder and kidnapping is it's the catalyst to the introduction, and also the stakes. It's not clear in this query (working on it now) but the ones behind the attacks is another clan of Protectors (who live in Eurasia. There are only two clans by the way). So in...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 2:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Here's a new version. At 275 words it's 78 words shorter than the original. It's significant, but I'm very reluctant to cut more. Here's my thought process: -I tidied the first paragraph up just a little, but because Shark and Snark often say starting with the MC is important, I'd rather keep it as ...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 1:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Truth be told, genetic mutations are usually spontaneous, unpredictable and we don't know what sets it off. Cancer is exactly like that... we know cells mutate and begin replicating very rapidly, but we don't know what sets it off. We know certain factors like environment (radiation, pollution, pois...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 1:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Haha, thanks wilderness! Coffee's so good! The reason I talk about the break-in, murder and kidnapping is it's the catalyst to the introduction, and also the stakes. It's not clear in this query (working on it now) but the ones behind the attacks is another clan of Protectors (who live in Eurasia. T...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 1:20 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

*blinks* well that's quite a turn, i thought this was a conspiracy type thriller... also, exactly how was gene splicing accomplished thousands of years ago? seems like a rather gaping plot hole . I just want to answer that question because I am a terrible geek with an invested interest in evolution...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 1:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

Thanks a lot for your feedback Emily! Funny you mention the Shark because I've spent hours there, especially to look at the queries that got a YES. This one received a yes immediatly. Story starts in paragraph two. (215 words, YA) This one got a yes after four revisions. Story starts in paragraph th...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 9:39 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query
Replies: 30
Views: 5382

Re: TRINITY, an urban fantasy query

I was worried the coffee jokes might be unfunny... they appear to work, so does the voice, so that's good. The fact that Emilie being a Protector isn't clear is a big red alert, so this needs ASAP fixing. I had issues in the original query explaining how Gabriel's research might influence them... it...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 12:46 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEETING OF THE WATERS -- 5 rejections means revision time!
Replies: 12
Views: 2200

Re: MEETING OF THE WATERS -- 5 rejections means revision time!

Hey Ryan! I too agree the new version is more focused, so that's great already. Dear [xx], In the online video game Ages: High Seas, unemployed EMT Jaime Adricks has teamed up with Brazilian gamer Alessandra Rocha as their pirate and spy characters try to stop time-traveling Nazis from conquering th...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 12:32 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alamandine's Song Query
Replies: 22
Views: 3246

Re: Alamandine's Song Query** Newest Version Page 2

Dear Agent, Alamandine “Mandi” Croach may be next in line for the crown of the Star Court in Faelyn. Her younger half-brother has been kidnapped and even the strongest seekers cannot find him. You started with the MC, that's really good. We don't know what Faelyn is at this point, nor what a seeker...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 12:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
Replies: 8
Views: 1298

Re: Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)

Dear [Agent]: Seventeen-year old Helene Jacobsen has never questioned why or how her parents adopted her. She's led a typical high school life in sunny Southern California: soccer games, dances and a part-time job at a café downtown. Typical, that is, until she meets Leo Andreyev, a time-traveling ...
by FK7
July 12th, 2010, 12:10 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)
Replies: 8
Views: 1298

Re: Timeless (YA Paranormal Romance)

Double post FTL