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by GeeGee55
May 15th, 2010, 10:12 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What's the Message?
Replies: 19
Views: 4569

Re: What's the Message?

I am struggling with this in my own work at the moment. A reader provided me with some editorial comments on my manuscript and one of the problems he/she saw in the novel was the lack of development of some secondary themes. The main theme the reader identified was something I had not even considere...
by GeeGee55
May 12th, 2010, 12:39 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Defender of the Crown
Replies: 27
Views: 4154

Re: Query: Defender of the Crown

I think this is quite good. Gives a good idea about what happens in the story. Just needs some tweaking. Dear [agent], Nicholas Benson never meant to kill anyone. Good beginning - At the age of thirteen, though,- this construction seems a bit off and I don't think though is the word you want. Perhap...
by GeeGee55
May 10th, 2010, 11:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: EVEN NEWER REVISIONS - QUERY - EXILED
Replies: 29
Views: 6109

Re: REVISIONS - QUERY - EXILED

Hi, mrm: You have a lot of advice here and it's easy to get lost in all of it. Just one thing: I'd keep the opening sentence from your last revision = it sets things up really well. It's a good hook I think. The Circle's a secret society of demon hunters... it explains the situation and gets me inte...
by GeeGee55
May 10th, 2010, 6:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What makes a person good?
Replies: 10
Views: 2664

Re: What makes a person good?

Interesting question and responses. What is your definition of a good person? Not sure I have a definition. I think over time my ideas about that question have changed. As a child to be good was to be obedient, to do as you were told, to behave correctly in public, to treat your siblings in a certai...
by GeeGee55
May 10th, 2010, 6:03 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: My first partial request
Replies: 29
Views: 5547

Re: My first partial request

Congratulations! It is a big step, enjoy it! Thanks for sharing your success, it gives the rest of us hope. Here's hoping they like the partial and request the full.
by GeeGee55
May 4th, 2010, 6:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Revision: Euphonious Brine
Replies: 36
Views: 7060

Re: Query Revision: Euphonious Brine

I think this is very good. I agree with others, if you think your manuscript needs work, it's probably best to do the work before submitting to an agent. Dear Agent, Thirteen-year-old Griffin Tutela doesn’t believe the stories his Grandma tells him about the forest behind her house. He rolls his ey...
by GeeGee55
May 4th, 2010, 6:13 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Tools in your Writing Toolbox
Replies: 6
Views: 1561

Re: Tools in your Writing Toolbox

Raymond Carver uses a device in the dialogue of "What We Talk About When We Talk About Love." One character mentions something in conversation that sparks another character to go off on a tangent. After a time, the first character says, " well anyway, about...whatever he was originally talking about...
by GeeGee55
May 3rd, 2010, 11:59 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Time to Fess Up - How Long Is It Taking You?
Replies: 48
Views: 14125

Re: Time to Fess Up - How Long Is It Taking You?

A long, long time. First draft of novel - hot, hot writing - 1 year, let it sit for a year, then draft 2, draft 3 ...and I have lost count - 8 or 9 years. But what fun I had along the way and what great people I got to know and what a lot I have learned.
by GeeGee55
May 3rd, 2010, 9:20 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Research Help - New York 1900's / Canada - Current
Replies: 16
Views: 3706

Re: Research Help - New York 1900's / Canada - Current

You are talking about a road trip of 2,669 km. Surely there is something of interest. Depends what kind of attractions interest you, how about any of the national parks or provincial parks for nature experiences. Eg: Cypress Hills Provincial Park in Saskatchewan - lodge pole pine, moose, wild turkey...
by GeeGee55
May 2nd, 2010, 12:29 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Voice and YA
Replies: 7
Views: 2198

Re: Voice and YA

Is voice in YA a separate issue from voice in any fiction? Voice is not something that can be imposed upon a work, but is something that develops in the writer as he/she gains experience/mastery of technique, makes choices regarding all the things mentioned above. There's an example on this very pos...
by GeeGee55
April 29th, 2010, 11:04 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy Query - I wish this will be the last!
Replies: 20
Views: 3996

Re: YA Fantasy Query - I wish this will be the last!

Hi, Shadow: I've seen this before and it's much clearer now. I think perhaps it suffers a bit with too much info - could be more concise and flow better : Dear Agent, Vitiosus is prince of the Lasserta, a nation of cruel beings that possess extraordinary intellectual and physical abilities. Raised ...
by GeeGee55
April 21st, 2010, 1:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: SYMBOLISM - RECOGNIZING & BUILDING
Replies: 16
Views: 6493

Re: SYMBOLISM - RECOGNIZING & BUILDING

Thank you, all of you, for the comments. I now have much to consider as I move forward with my revision.
by GeeGee55
April 21st, 2010, 12:47 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: query - dirge of the desert
Replies: 25
Views: 4078

Re: query - dirge of the desert

You've done so much work on this and it's really improved. I like this version better than the latest one - I think it flows better and gives me more details of the story Except: Dear Agent: After waking up covered in panther fur- I think you lost some clarity here in the revisions, on a first read...
by GeeGee55
April 20th, 2010, 5:29 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Intro and Outro
Replies: 12
Views: 2693

Re: Intro and Outro

There are a few sentences that need fixing, but I don't even care because this is so interesting/compelling. I'd definitely keep reading. From what I've seen of the other passages, this could be the solution to give the reader a place to orient themselves or rest from the more intense passages of th...
by GeeGee55
April 19th, 2010, 1:19 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: SYMBOLISM - RECOGNIZING & BUILDING
Replies: 16
Views: 6493

Re: SYMBOLISM - RECOGNIZING & BUILDING

Thanks, Polymath. You correctly discerned that my question related to symbolic objects or images within the work and not to Symbolism. I'm a little embarrassed, but, oh well, at least I learned something and won't make that mistake again. I often have difficulty extracting a theme from my work and y...