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by GeeGee55
May 30th, 2010, 1:10 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How about discussing Free Indirect Discourse?
Replies: 17
Views: 3032

Re: How about discussing Free Indirect Discourse?

Well, I have to disagree that there is no right or wrong or what is the point, really? It doesn't feel like playing it feels like a test. However, I will attempt it. Since I am new to this subject, I will not see things that others might. But, how else does one learn? Let's play. Locate Direct, Ind...
by GeeGee55
May 30th, 2010, 12:56 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: One Liners
Replies: 19
Views: 4622

Re: One Liners

J.T., you are good at this. Personally I don't know if an agent would quibble over the use of "and" or "for". Personally, I like the "and". "And" here's mine - totally stealing from comments Kirrel put on my Query post. Gus Kelman loses his baby boy to death, his wife to depression, and his farm to ...
by GeeGee55
May 29th, 2010, 2:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Urban Fantasy - CHANNELING TROUBLE (revised)
Replies: 3
Views: 978

Re: YA Urban Fantasy - CHANNELING TROUBLE (revised)

I think this is pretty good, I get a good sense of what the story is about. But the sentences could be a little tighter. I know how incredibly difficult this is. Good for you for keeping at it. I've rewritten this with the premise-complication-stakes format and then gone over it again and again with...
by GeeGee55
May 27th, 2010, 10:13 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: REVISION SUGGESTIONS FROM AGENT
Replies: 7
Views: 1965

Re: REVISION SUGGESTIONS FROM AGENT

Thank you to everyone who jumped in. You provided me with exactly the info I needed to consider.
by GeeGee55
May 27th, 2010, 12:39 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: REVISION SUGGESTIONS FROM AGENT
Replies: 7
Views: 1965

REVISION SUGGESTIONS FROM AGENT

Hi, Nathan: First, thank you for all the work you've put into these Forums. I'm wondering about attempting revisions to my manuscript based on editorial comments made by a reader for an agent. They expressed interest in the manuscript, said it was very moving, but some secondary themes were undevelo...
by GeeGee55
May 23rd, 2010, 1:19 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: GHOSTS VS ALIENS
Replies: 24
Views: 4948

Re: Query: GHOSTS VS ALIENS

Does anyone have a sense of humour I could buy? It seems I need one. How does "humanity" work for you guys as opposed to "everyone"? Better, but maybe more - the day all of humanity Should I put the first sentence in present tense: The day humanity dies sucks for Lucy? I think yes, since the rest of...
by GeeGee55
May 23rd, 2010, 12:27 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: How about discussing Free Indirect Discourse?
Replies: 17
Views: 3032

Re: How about discussing Free Indirect Discourse?

I once drove three and a half hours to attend a workshop on narrative technique and we spent a very limited amount of time on free indirect discourse. Each of the participants identified a passage in his/her work that could be changed using FID. When I asked the instructor why it was better he had a...
by GeeGee55
May 21st, 2010, 9:31 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Dialogue Tags
Replies: 7
Views: 1254

Re: Dialogue Tags

You probably have a couple of options - the goal is clarity and you must use the same formatting throughout the whole manuscript. Have you thought of italics? It could work. This is just an example, you'd want to play with it a bit. “Once, long ago,” Joe said, “Coyote decided to take a wife but did...
by GeeGee55
May 20th, 2010, 11:44 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Book title inspiration!
Replies: 20
Views: 9448

Re: Book title inspiration!

I have a terrible time putting a name to my short stories and to my novel. A more seasoned writer suggested that a possible title could be found by identifying something symbolic in the work and then playing with that to come up with something fitting. Or not. The Story of Edgar Sawtelle - not exact...
by GeeGee55
May 19th, 2010, 8:52 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - YEEOD
Replies: 8
Views: 2286

Re: Query - YEEOD

Hi, Nessa: I have found the query-writing process to be one of the most difficult things ever. Hope these comments help. I haven't looked at the other comments, so these are my impressions. Good luck. Thanks FK7! I have read all the HP books and it's ot like them. More like an urban fantasy where ma...
by GeeGee55
May 19th, 2010, 8:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: GHOSTS VS ALIENS
Replies: 24
Views: 4948

Re: Query: GHOSTS VS ALIENS

Hi, K:'

You've got an interesting idea. My only concern is with the tone of the query - it seems kind of fun/light-hearted which doesn't really seem to fit with the events. Is this the tone your novel is written in?
by GeeGee55
May 19th, 2010, 7:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: STORYTELLER - Example of Excellent Writing
Replies: 1
Views: 685

Re: STORYTELLER - Example of Excellent Writing

Thanks, Marilyn, for sharing this excellent story with us. How lucky to belong to a group mentored by a writer of this calibre.
by GeeGee55
May 17th, 2010, 11:47 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What's the Message?
Replies: 19
Views: 4569

Re: What's the Message?

An example of a low-concept premise; Captain Ahab's peg leg is made of a tooth taken from Moby Dick to replace the leg that Moby Dick took, showing not telling that the two adversaries are inextriably linked in life and death and in nature. A generic high-concept premise of the novel is a man goes ...
by GeeGee55
May 17th, 2010, 11:20 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: You have another think coming
Replies: 35
Views: 11334

Re: You have another think coming

My mom used that expression all the time when I was a kid. If you think that, you've got another think coming. It was usually regarding some wacky idea my siblings (never me) had, and looking back on it, it was really quite generous of her to give them (never me) another think.
by GeeGee55
May 15th, 2010, 10:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BROKEN MIRROR, new query, new delivery
Replies: 38
Views: 7174

Re: BROKEN MIRROR, new query, new delivery

This new query is really quite a lot better, I think. Still needs to be worked on, but it's clearer. I might be out to lunch with this idea, but perhaps it will be of some help to you. I tend to feel my way emotionally through a story when I'm writing it. From samples of your writing I've seen else...