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by GeeGee55
June 27th, 2010, 6:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: eror
Replies: 38
Views: 6433

Re: Bengali Girls Don't -- version 3

I really love the idea of your book. But...ah yes, there's always a but is there not? It almost seems to me that you are describing two different books. The first part of the query opens with the young girl defying her parents, and gives some of the plot, and that's interesting enough, but the last...
by GeeGee55
June 27th, 2010, 6:03 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: High Concept Improvement
Replies: 30
Views: 4423

Re: High Concept Improvement

http://www.fictionmatters.com/2010/01/0 ... h-concept/

This is a link to an article entitled What the Heck is High Concept? You probably will have to copy/paste it into your browsers address bar
by GeeGee55
June 27th, 2010, 5:56 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Favorite quotes about writing
Replies: 62
Views: 9055

Re: Favorite quotes about writing

Paraphrasing John Steinbeck because I have a poor memory:

"There is only one story and that is the story of the battle between good and evil in us all."
by GeeGee55
June 24th, 2010, 12:09 am
Forum: Books
Topic: Book: OTHER PEOPLE'S REJECTION LETTERS
Replies: 2
Views: 627

Re: Book: OTHER PEOPLE'S REJECTION LETTERS

This title reminds me of a time when I received another writer's rejection letter in the envelope that included my form rejection. His letter was a personalized one from the editor but..as I recall, it said the writing was not yet strong enough, many scenes were overwritten and the disturbing mysoge...
by GeeGee55
June 21st, 2010, 1:23 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Questions you should ask yourself when critiquing peers
Replies: 4
Views: 2362

Re: Questions you should ask yourself when critiquing peers

How about: In no particular order 6. Do I know the author's intentions for the piece? Is it for publication or personal enjoyment? Not everyone writes for publication. 7. Considering the author's skill level, what are appropriate comments to provide to help that person improve the piece? 8. What do ...
by GeeGee55
June 20th, 2010, 2:23 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy
Replies: 20
Views: 3433

Re: Hidden in Shadows - Urban Fantasy

Hi, NZ: I didn't read through the other versions, so here's my reaction to this version: "Why am I a hired assassin? Two reasons. One, because it pays well. Extremely well. And two, because I can." This opening is catchy. Some ppl would say you shouldn't use it, especially if it's a quote from the ...
by GeeGee55
June 20th, 2010, 1:40 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Rookie Mistakes?
Replies: 66
Views: 9358

Re: Rookie Mistakes?

Most of my mistakes resulted from not having the experience to see what was really on the page, that what was in my mind hadn't made it onto the page in a clear way. I had trouble with transitioning smoothly between scenes, going smoothly into a flashback so as not to startle the reader. Clarity reg...
by GeeGee55
June 13th, 2010, 10:59 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: How old are you?
Replies: 113
Views: 22536

Re: How old are you?

I'm 56, one of the geezers. I firmly believe you don't qualify for geezerhood unless you're over 50. I started writing in my late 40s. I was always a 'dreamer' but decided to start writing down my daydreams and they turned into a novel. I had no formal education in literature, I started by attending...
by GeeGee55
June 12th, 2010, 4:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: eror
Replies: 38
Views: 6433

Re: Bengali Girls Don't -- version 2

Hi, Z: I find your story intriguing. This version is much better, gives a much better idea what the story is about. If you saw Polymath's post about paying it forward, that's what I'm trying to do here. I'm no expert, but maybe I'll learn something by doing this. Take whatever comments you find hel...
by GeeGee55
June 11th, 2010, 12:08 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 283001

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: SPIRIT HILL Genre: Literary Sorry the formatting is funky! The Kelman baby died at eleven months, early in the strange, hot spring of 1938. His young parents lived in a one-room cabin in the Allanville District in the north of Saskatchewan. It was a land full of moisture--the earth rebounding...
by GeeGee55
June 9th, 2010, 5:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Bring Me Back, women's fiction--Updated 9/23
Replies: 32
Views: 4944

Re: Query: Bring Me Back, women's fiction--Updated

I think you've got a good query here, gives a good idea about the story line and it's interesting. Love the ass over tea kettle line, too. Dear Agent, Claire Abby was seventeen when she fell ass over teakettle for newly-c ut famous British rock star Christopher Penman—madly, deeply in love. Christo...
by GeeGee55
June 9th, 2010, 5:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Bron To Die - Last Take
Replies: 9
Views: 1530

Re: Bron To Die - Last Take

Nessa: I think you give a pretty good idea what the book is about in this query. Send it out and see what sort of response you get. It has to be as good as you can make it, but it doesn't have to be perfect. I just have a few suggestions about sentence structure. Guys, here is my newest revision wit...
by GeeGee55
June 3rd, 2010, 11:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for Thriller - Fresh Meat, Notes to Commenters
Replies: 28
Views: 4333

Re: Query for Thriller - Fresh Meat, Notes to Commenters

I think both versions are good. You could try with one and if it doesn't get the response you want, try the other. -------------------- While under FBI surveillance, psychic Jodie Belay kidnaps a three-year-old girl. Agent William DeAngelis doesn’t panic. Jodie’s ESP follows a well-documented patter...
by GeeGee55
June 2nd, 2010, 11:10 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Sentence Beginnings
Replies: 9
Views: 1877

Re: Sentence Beginnings

Hi, Robin: A textbook I found helpful is Beyond the Conventions, Studies in Prose Writing by Jeanne Gunner. It's mostly for developing essays, but it also includes sections on sentence structure and style, as well as sentence focus. Recursive style vs. Linear style is also discussed. Even more helpf...
by GeeGee55
May 30th, 2010, 3:54 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How about discussing Free Indirect Discourse?
Replies: 17
Views: 2552

Re: How about discussing Free Indirect Discourse?

You're funny, J.T. I like your attitude. Tests can be playful? Imagine that.