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by Chris48
May 14th, 2010, 10:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: dirge of the desert - new attempt, new slant
Replies: 50
Views: 7524

Re: dirge of the desert - new attempt, new slant

I agree with what Quill has to say. I am left wanting to know how she was transformed. I will also say that you may have too much information for a query letter. Maybe some of the details (ie: naming all people involved) would be better suited for a synopsis. I know though that some stories are so j...
by Chris48
May 14th, 2010, 10:44 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Second redo for Meg O'Brien Wears A Thong
Replies: 7
Views: 1581

Second redo for Meg O'Brien Wears A Thong

This is my second time to post my query for feedback. This one is much better than my last, but must need polishing since I have not had any takers from my submissions. I'm looking for kind, constructive critisism - Thanks -Chris48 As a Massage Therapist, Meg O’Brien is in the business of making peo...
by Chris48
February 13th, 2010, 2:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Please Help
Replies: 8
Views: 1699

Re: Query - Please Help

I agree that there are too many questions. I alos want a little more info on Oxford. I really like the second paragraph.

Chris
by Chris48
February 13th, 2010, 2:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Help
Replies: 3
Views: 934

Query Help

I've sent out a few queries, but no takers yer. I could use some feedback - thanks - Chris Meg O’Brien has never been what most people would call normal; from her unusual career choice as a Massage Therapist, to her tendency to come to the aid of those who most people would cross to the other side o...