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by Mary
March 1st, 2010, 8:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Crossing Fate (Contemporary YA)
Replies: 9
Views: 1589

Re: Query: Crossing Fate (Contemporary YA)

I was hooked by the query and it would definitely make me want to see some pages and synopsis! I must respectfully disagree with Mary about one point; I was just looking at "Query Shark" and she specifically said to start with the story, as you have done, and leave the part about why you queried th...
by Mary
February 28th, 2010, 9:20 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Crossing Fate (Contemporary YA)
Replies: 9
Views: 1589

Re: Query: Crossing Fate (Contemporary YA)

Hi all, I'd love feedback on my query letter if you have time. Thanks in advance! Dear [Agent]: Helene Jacobsen has never believed in fairy tales. But when the plucky seventeen-year old meets Leo Andreyev, a time-traveling Russian prince, that’s exactly what she gets – an upside-down version of a f...
by Mary
February 13th, 2010, 12:55 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 41343

Re: Share your opening sentence!

Josin wrote:We're all immortal until we die.
Impressive opening - 10.

Here's one of mine...

My heart clenched at the sight of the folded white slip of paper barely noticeable in the vent of my locker.
by Mary
February 13th, 2010, 11:11 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)
Replies: 13
Views: 2969

Re: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)

I love the story idea. Good luck at the conference.
(Feeling too new to critique)