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by ryanznock
July 16th, 2011, 4:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip
Replies: 7
Views: 1484

Re: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip

Thanks for the suggestion. His agency is British, so it's not top of my list, but it's a factor to consider, especially since I know another gamer-turned-writer.
by ryanznock
July 13th, 2011, 10:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: SWANSONG: THE FALLEN Sci-fi thriller
Replies: 10
Views: 2022

Re: Query: SWANSONG: THE FALLEN Sci-fi thriller

Ha. If nothing else, your 'To:' lines are making my day. (Just in case, though, you understand you're supposed to use the agent's name in the real query, right? *grin*) I'm still not a fan of rookie Lieutenant. Maybe just rookie. Or 'newly-promoted'? I like the first sentence here, but I generally t...
by ryanznock
July 13th, 2011, 9:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip
Replies: 7
Views: 1484

Re: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip

Thanks for the feedback. I think I'll take a shot at making the second version less confusing; my local writers group preferred it, but I can see how some stuff wouldn't make sense if this if your first exposure to the plot. Since you said it wasn't clear, here's the short version. Bear in mind, it'...
by ryanznock
July 13th, 2011, 11:32 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: NO SHELTER FROM DARKNESS (horror)
Replies: 13
Views: 2963

Re: Query: NO SHELTER FROM DARKNESS (horror)

Commenting on the second query: [quote="markimedes"]A vampire is unwittingly raised by a human family, and must face her sinister legacy in order to salvage her human existence. I'd just keep the first half, then stick the second half perhaps as a capstone of the plot overview. Start with the big pi...
by ryanznock
July 13th, 2011, 11:10 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip
Replies: 7
Views: 1484

Re: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip

Thanks! I came up with a different version. I think this one's punchier: A fleet of time-traveling Nazis have invaded the 17th century Caribbean. Sure, it’s just a video game, but it’s one Jaime Adricks takes very seriously, and he thinks the cross-over has ruined it. He’s about to abandon his digit...
by ryanznock
June 28th, 2011, 9:59 pm
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 338876

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

I've been working on a large game writing project, and on my blog I put up some discussion of how you plan for a long-term series. If folks are interested, I'd love to put up more posts on the topic in more detail.

ryanznock.blogspot.com
by ryanznock
June 28th, 2011, 9:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Alternate history - science fiction: THE PRINCE OF TROUBLE
Replies: 8
Views: 1927

Re: Alternate history - science fiction: THE PRINCE OF TROUBLE

I dig the retro future concept. First things that jumped out at me: I've seen Stygia used too many other places, and it's the only vaguely mythological name in the query, so it feels out of place. 'No such thing as an easy job in New Futura.' I'm guessing you were going for the noir-esque tone, impl...
by ryanznock
June 28th, 2011, 9:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip
Replies: 7
Views: 1484

MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip

How do you think this sounds, fellow author? Dear [agent], In MEETING OF THE WATERS, Jaime Adricks leads his online pirate crew in the video game Ages, battling time-traveling Nazis who have invaded the 17th century Caribbean. But when Jaime learns that his ex-girlfriend Afi has disappeared in the A...
by ryanznock
June 28th, 2011, 9:06 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Getting back to old projects.
Replies: 6
Views: 1188

Getting back to old projects.

Yikes. So I haven't posted in 8 months. I've been working on a different project (game design - http://www.enworld.org/ap/zeitgeist.html , and I'm actually getting published and paid for it!), but after a nice gap to let my novel simmer on the back-burner, I did a thorough revision in May and June. ...
by ryanznock
October 6th, 2010, 8:31 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Voices in Your Head(s)
Replies: 1
Views: 613

Voices in Your Head(s)

I feel the best inspiration comes from mixing multiple streams of thought together. For instance, I’m reading through the latest novel of my favorite author ( Anathem by Neal Stephenson), while simultaneously working through the DVDs of The Wire . I’m loving both, but something struck me when I comp...
by ryanznock
September 13th, 2010, 1:33 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 282981

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Meeting of the Waters Genre: Urban Fantasy (248 words) I awake to the opening notes of my leitmotif playing on Chelsea’s TV. I peel open one eye to see what episode she’s watching. The title – Fleet of the Broken Cross – hovers over a treasure map, and then the parchment burns away to reveal ...
by ryanznock
September 3rd, 2010, 12:43 am
Forum: Social Media and Book Promotion
Topic: Do you have a new blog post?
Replies: 2688
Views: 338876

Re: Do you have a new blog post?

I talk about going to Dragon*Con to seek an agent, and the inspiration for my novel.

http://ryanznock.blogspot.com/2010/09/welcome.html
by ryanznock
August 11th, 2010, 1:31 am
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: Old Ask Nathan Thread
Replies: 793
Views: 192766

Re: Ask Nathan

I've had a piece of short fiction hosted at an agent's blog, but so far nothing published in print. I'm guessing that, unless I'm querying an associate of that agent, that's not worth mentioning, right?
by ryanznock
August 6th, 2010, 6:05 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Rate your WiP Titles!
Replies: 30
Views: 4146

Re: Rate your WiP Titles!

WilliamMJones, no negativity intended, but neither of your titles jump out at me. Maybe folks who feel less appreciated would appreciate I'm a Nobody more. Monster Under the Bed has the same problem, I feel. It doesn't stand out and say, "Hey, you probably haven't read a story like me before." I lik...
by ryanznock
August 6th, 2010, 4:24 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Lost - Possible Spoilers!
Replies: 261
Views: 59758

Re: Lost - Possible Spoilers!

Heehee. That was nice.