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- February 24th, 2012, 3:33 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First Chapter: Knightly (YA)
- Replies: 2
- Views: 16512
First Chapter: Knightly (YA)
I’m basically a mutant, but mom prefers to compare me to a fairy tale princess. I don’t like the idea of having to be rescued by a prince in the 21st century, they run straight to the tabloids, not to the rescue of an ugly girl in Nowheresville England. No, mutant was a better theory, no matter what...
- October 21st, 2011, 12:47 am
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Looking for a critique partner from the UK
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1517
Looking for a critique partner from the UK
Found sFound someone...thank you.
- February 27th, 2010, 3:15 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4387
Re: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)
I like the relationship between Seb and Grayson. Please make sure that you always use a new paragraph for each new speaker in dialogue, I got lost toward the end there. I'd have to see more of the book to know if this is the best place to start the book...but I would probably start it when Grayson a...
- February 25th, 2010, 10:54 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
- Replies: 38
- Views: 20756
Re: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
"You dirtily wrote a sentence involving the word apparently?" I said disgustedly. To which I replied, "It's closer to say I became increasingly dirtier whilst writing a sentence using the word 'apparently', but the true extent of my dirtiness hadn't become apparent until I more close...
- February 25th, 2010, 6:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: The Price of Blasphemy
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2027
Re: Query: The Price of Blasphemy
Dear agent, Smoldering , five churches within the Bible Belt are smoldering on Christmas morning because a woman chose her religion over love. I would delete the first smoldering I would like you to represent my book, The Price of Blasphemy , a complete 62,000 word work of up-market fiction and soc...
- February 24th, 2010, 7:53 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
- Replies: 21
- Views: 11507
Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Also, I think that maybe starting with the first two or three chapters would work, just to see how well we'd work together. :)
- February 23rd, 2010, 1:38 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
- Replies: 38
- Views: 20756
Re: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
"You dirtily wrote a sentence involving the word apparently?" I said disgustedly.
- February 23rd, 2010, 12:46 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2
- Replies: 25
- Views: 15555
Re: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2
I really like the idea. I like it when sci-fi meets fantasy. (Like Star Wars or books by LE Modesitt Jr.) The third revision looks good to me! Good luck with this!
- February 23rd, 2010, 12:28 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
- Replies: 38
- Views: 20756
Re: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
They are mainly to be avoided mostly. (haha.)
This was discussed at a writer's conference I went to. If it takes you twenty or so words to get around the use of an adverb, you may want to consider using it. Other than that, I think you shouldn't.
This was discussed at a writer's conference I went to. If it takes you twenty or so words to get around the use of an adverb, you may want to consider using it. Other than that, I think you shouldn't.
- February 22nd, 2010, 11:29 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
- Replies: 21
- Views: 11507
Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Found an awesome critique partner!
- February 22nd, 2010, 10:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query (Writer's Block YA Fantasy)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3883
Re: Query (Writer's Block YA Fantasy)
Thank you for the crit aspiring! I will definitely rework it and hopefully post a revision soon.
- February 22nd, 2010, 10:43 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)
- Replies: 13
- Views: 5944
Re: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)
Thank you for the link! It does sound exactly like my story. I will have to consider it.
- February 22nd, 2010, 2:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Too Enchanted *getting closer*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8025
Re: Query: Too Enchanted
The newest version reads well for me. I think it sounds cute, and I'd definitely read it. I love the twice on the frog prince story. Good luck with it!
- February 22nd, 2010, 2:01 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Music or quiet when you write?
- Replies: 64
- Views: 30913
Re: Music or quiet when you write?
Niether...television, a book on my lap, and people talking around me. I need background noise and someone to ignore. (Probably stems from trying write during my classes in High School...haha.) The only problem comes when people actually start thinking I'm paying attention to their conversations, or ...
- February 22nd, 2010, 1:58 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: BELLE (YA-FANTASY)
- Replies: 16
- Views: 6088
Re: QUERY: BELLE (YA-FANTASY)
Ooh I like it! I really like the way you've rephrased the query. The last paragraph particularly rocks. Good luck with t his! (And I hope to see a page or two...I'm better with those than queries. ;))