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by Lunetta22
February 24th, 2012, 3:33 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First Chapter: Knightly (YA)
Replies: 1
Views: 2058

First Chapter: Knightly (YA)

I’m basically a mutant, but mom prefers to compare me to a fairy tale princess. I don’t like the idea of having to be rescued by a prince in the 21st century, they run straight to the tabloids, not to the rescue of an ugly girl in Nowheresville England. No, mutant was a better theory, no matter what...
by Lunetta22
October 21st, 2011, 12:47 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a critique partner from the UK
Replies: 0
Views: 869

Looking for a critique partner from the UK

Found sFound someone...thank you. :)
by Lunetta22
February 27th, 2010, 3:15 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)
Replies: 9
Views: 2140

Re: First Five Pages (Contemporary YA)

I like the relationship between Seb and Grayson. Please make sure that you always use a new paragraph for each new speaker in dialogue, I got lost toward the end there. I'd have to see more of the book to know if this is the best place to start the book...but I would probably start it when Grayson a...
by Lunetta22
February 25th, 2010, 10:54 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
Replies: 38
Views: 11396

Re: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!

"You dirtily wrote a sentence involving the word apparently?" I said disgustedly. To which I replied, "It's closer to say I became increasingly dirtier whilst writing a sentence using the word 'apparently', but the true extent of my dirtiness hadn't become apparent until I more closely reviewed the...
by Lunetta22
February 25th, 2010, 6:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Price of Blasphemy
Replies: 3
Views: 943

Re: Query: The Price of Blasphemy

Dear agent, Smoldering , five churches within the Bible Belt are smoldering on Christmas morning because a woman chose her religion over love. I would delete the first smoldering I would like you to represent my book, The Price of Blasphemy , a complete 62,000 word work of up-market fiction and soc...
by Lunetta22
February 24th, 2010, 7:53 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Replies: 21
Views: 6727

Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?

Also, I think that maybe starting with the first two or three chapters would work, just to see how well we'd work together. :)
by Lunetta22
February 23rd, 2010, 1:38 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
Replies: 38
Views: 11396

Re: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!

"You dirtily wrote a sentence involving the word apparently?" I said disgustedly.
by Lunetta22
February 23rd, 2010, 12:46 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2
Replies: 25
Views: 8626

Re: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2

I really like the idea. I like it when sci-fi meets fantasy. (Like Star Wars or books by LE Modesitt Jr.) The third revision looks good to me! Good luck with this!
by Lunetta22
February 23rd, 2010, 12:28 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!
Replies: 38
Views: 11396

Re: What Did Adverbs Ever Do to You?!

They are mainly to be avoided mostly. (haha.)

This was discussed at a writer's conference I went to. If it takes you twenty or so words to get around the use of an adverb, you may want to consider using it. Other than that, I think you shouldn't.
by Lunetta22
February 22nd, 2010, 11:29 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Do you need a Critique Partner?
Replies: 21
Views: 6727

Re: Do you need a Critique Partner?

Found an awesome critique partner!
by Lunetta22
February 22nd, 2010, 10:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query (Writer's Block YA Fantasy)
Replies: 10
Views: 1813

Re: Query (Writer's Block YA Fantasy)

Thank you for the crit aspiring! I will definitely rework it and hopefully post a revision soon.
by Lunetta22
February 22nd, 2010, 10:43 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)
Replies: 13
Views: 2966

Re: Writer's Block (Story Excerpt)

Thank you for the link! It does sound exactly like my story. I will have to consider it.
by Lunetta22
February 22nd, 2010, 2:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Too Enchanted *getting closer*
Replies: 19
Views: 3539

Re: Query: Too Enchanted

The newest version reads well for me. I think it sounds cute, and I'd definitely read it. I love the twice on the frog prince story. Good luck with it!
by Lunetta22
February 22nd, 2010, 2:01 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Music or quiet when you write?
Replies: 64
Views: 16744

Re: Music or quiet when you write?

Niether...television, a book on my lap, and people talking around me. I need background noise and someone to ignore. (Probably stems from trying write during my classes in High School...haha.) The only problem comes when people actually start thinking I'm paying attention to their conversations, or ...
by Lunetta22
February 22nd, 2010, 1:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: BELLE (YA-FANTASY)
Replies: 16
Views: 2778

Re: QUERY: BELLE (YA-FANTASY)

Ooh I like it! I really like the way you've rephrased the query. The last paragraph particularly rocks. Good luck with t his! (And I hope to see a page or two...I'm better with those than queries. ;))