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by ddelano
May 7th, 2011, 1:11 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Women's Fiction Recommendations
Replies: 3
Views: 1652

Re: Women's Fiction Recommendations

I'd love to give some recommendations, but I have to admit that I remain confused about what actually falls into the genre of "women's fiction." Off the top of my head, I wanted to recommend Tracy Chevalier's "Remarkable Creatures," but maybe that is really historical fiction. Lisa See's "Shanghai G...
by ddelano
June 16th, 2010, 1:13 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: The Land Doesn't Leave
Replies: 8
Views: 1805

Re: The Land Doesn't Leave

First, I really like the title. I think this opening shows a lot of promise, but needs a bit of streamlining. I like your initial description, but the first sentence was so long I had to read it a few times over to get it. I would break it up or cut it some. Also, I found the description of the girl...
by ddelano
June 14th, 2010, 12:04 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Which opener grabs you the most? Women's fiction.
Replies: 24
Views: 7172

Re: Which opener grabs you the most? Women's fiction.

I liked the second one also. I think your prose is lovely - it has a literary feel to it, even though I get the sense that it is not intended to be a literary novel. The second excerpt set the scene nicely for me, and I wanted to read more. But to me the first excerpt felt like you had taken your lo...
by ddelano
June 13th, 2010, 2:44 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: So who's entering Nathan's first page contest?
Replies: 55
Views: 13318

Re: So who's entering Nathan's first page contest?

I wouldn't worry about it. Nathan started the contest for people who follow the blog, not us forumites. I'm more of a reader myself. I come often, but comment rarely. :D Edit: I should clarify because it looks like I'm telling you to be inactive. What I meant to say was that you shouldn't feel guil...
by ddelano
June 11th, 2010, 3:55 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: So who's entering Nathan's first page contest?
Replies: 55
Views: 13318

Re: So who's entering Nathan's first page contest?

I entered, and I only have a few other comments posted. Sorry if this bothers anyone - I am pretty new to this site, and am so swamped with other items of life (kids, work), that by the time I get to read Nathan's blog post there are already so many comments posted that I can't imagine anyone would ...
by ddelano
June 10th, 2010, 12:15 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 282955

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Letters from Hong Kong Genre: Literary Fiction (word count: 250) Chapter 1 South China Sea 1846 I woke to the swell of the sea. The small, dank cabin was cold and full of Mother’s troubled tossing, Father’s steady breaths. I longed for air. Crisp, clean air after a new fallen snow. But there ...