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by thomasn
February 12th, 2010, 5:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Letter: You Dear, Sweet Man
Replies: 4
Views: 878

Query Letter: You Dear, Sweet Man

In the neon world of advertising, everything is for grabs: ideas, people, even the future. But, what if the line that separates an advertisement from the real world were suddenly erased? What if the person of your fantasies stepped from an ad and beckoned you to follow her back, inviting you to melt...
by thomasn
February 12th, 2010, 5:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Thriller Query (Genre, that is). Open to Suggestions!
Replies: 18
Views: 3433

Re: Thriller Query (Genre, that is). Open to Suggestions!

With my query education, I was taught to tell the whole story for the agent. Use a hook to grab their interest and tell them the story, even the ending. I have received comments from a few agents that stated, "Don't tease me." I could be wrong, of course, because every agent has a different idea of ...
by thomasn
February 12th, 2010, 4:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Replies: 8
Views: 1664

Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining

Hi Nicole:
To tell the truth, your first query letter was difficult to read and follow. The revision was a bit better, but still there seems to be too much shoved in the query. Just the way I read it. Hope this helps.