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- November 4th, 2014, 10:53 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query YA- The Last
- Replies: 6
- Views: 9967
Query YA- The Last
Dear Agent, I am submitting for your consideration THE LAST, a 74,000 word YA sci-fi that will appeal to fans of X-Men and steampunk. To Rynn, locks are more of an invitation then an obstacle. She’s a pyrokinetic telepath, and one of eleven surviving Afflicted, a hidden group of human beings with su...
- January 31st, 2011, 12:00 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query -IRON HEART-
- Replies: 24
- Views: 7920
Re: Query -IRON HEART-
Latest Update: I've sent out the previous letter and haven't gotten any replies so I'm rewriting. Any comments would be greatly appreciated. Dear Agent, Magic and Machine exist side by side in Garn and it is Terik’s dream to become a mechanic’s assistant. As a toad with the ability to control hot a...
- October 18th, 2010, 12:36 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query -IRON HEART-
- Replies: 24
- Views: 7920
Re: Query -IRON HEART-
I've made the minor adjustments suggested. I'm going to start sending it out this week and see what I get. I'll keep everyone posted on how it goes.
Thank you to everyone who helped me with this. :)
Thank you to everyone who helped me with this. :)
- October 11th, 2010, 11:26 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query -IRON HEART-
- Replies: 24
- Views: 7920
Re: Query -IRON HEART-
*Newest Version* Thank you everyone for all of your great advice. I think I'm almost there.(and hopefully I didn't just jinx myself by saying that) Dear Agent, Terik is a toad living in the kingdom of Garn where magic and machines exist side by side. But Terik’s life is turned upside down when he i...
- October 11th, 2010, 11:17 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Queen of Heaven - YA Fantasy Query
- Replies: 15
- Views: 5952
Re: Queen of Heaven - YA Fantasy Query
~ Thirteen year old Jin wants to conquer the world. She just needs an army. - This is fantastic, great hook. Jin was banished from her homeland after she discovered that her father was murdered by his most trusted adviser. She then traveled north to seek aid, hoping to convince the emperor to take ...
- October 8th, 2010, 11:03 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query -IRON HEART-
- Replies: 24
- Views: 7920
Re: Query -IRON HEART-
*Latest Version* Not sure what you could replace it with, but "life is turned upside down" is sort of a cliche. [/quote] I kind of agree but I'm not sure what I could replace it with. Anyone have a good idea? Dear Agent, Terik is a toad living in the kingdom of Garn where magic and machin...
- October 7th, 2010, 11:20 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query -IRON HEART-
- Replies: 24
- Views: 7920
Re: Query -IRON HEART-
*Updated* *Sorry about not posting correctly, I wasn’t sure on the best way to do it but now I know. *Thank you so much to everyone who commented. And a special thanks to Down the Well. *To answer a few questions. (these are just explanations, please don’t think I’m being rude or ungrateful, becaus...
- October 4th, 2010, 6:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query -IRON HEART-
- Replies: 24
- Views: 7920
Query -IRON HEART-
*Newest Version at the bottom* -Thanks to everyone who has commented. You all have been very helpful. Dear Agent, Terik is a toad living in the kingdom of Garn where magic and machine live side by side. But Terik’s life is turned upside down when he is cursed against his will by a crazy witch with ...
- April 26th, 2010, 12:39 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: dirge of the desert - new attempt, new slant
- Replies: 50
- Views: 17565
Re: dirge of the desert - new attempt, new slant
Wow, this sounds like a great story. Your second query is great, it made sense and explained the story very well. I wish I could give you good advice, but i'm very new at this. So I'll just give you a big round of applause and say good job and keep it up.
- April 26th, 2010, 11:16 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query letter for Too Enchanted; fantasy (here we go again)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 4076
Re: Query letter for Too Enchanted *second times a charm*
I AM BACK WITH MORE CHANGES TO MY QUERY. ANY THOUGHTS OR ADVICE WOULD BE VERY WELCOME. Like any self-respecting magic toad all Tirian wanted was to live a quiet life in the forest kingdom of Garn. All Rynn wanted was to complete her latest job and get paid. But not everyone gets what they want. Tir...
- April 1st, 2010, 11:57 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query letter for Too Enchanted; fantasy (here we go again)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 4076
Re: Query letter for Too Enchanted *second times a charm*
I wrote in awhile ago with my first query letter and got some great feedback. Now I'm asking for it again, I've changed my book a lot and have adjusted my query letter to match. Please review and give helpful comments. Thank You. Dear Agent, Tirian always expected his life to be quite quiet and pea...
- March 31st, 2010, 5:29 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query letter for Too Enchanted; fantasy (here we go again)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 4076
Query letter for Too Enchanted; fantasy (here we go again)
*SCROLL TO THE BOTTOM OF THE PAGE TO READ LATEST QUERY* Dear Agent, Rynn’s job as a hero for hire often has her in dangerous and difficult situations, but when her latest job to rescue a kidnapped human girl goes seriously wrong, she’s left with two options, take on a job for the forest elders of G...
- March 1st, 2010, 10:41 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Too Enchanted *getting closer*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8016
Re: Query: Too Enchanted *Final draft of query letter?*
Hey thanks everyone for your wonderful advice, I've made changes accordingly and have sent my query out to a few agents. Keep your fingers crossed for me. You guys have been so great and so helpful. Dear Agent, Tirian is an enchanted toad with magical powers living in the forest kingdom of Garn, ho...
- February 26th, 2010, 11:03 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Too Enchanted *getting closer*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8016
Re: Query: Too Enchanted *Final draft of query letter?*
I just need a final validation on my query letter. Did I get it right. Please let me know what you think.
- February 23rd, 2010, 11:22 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Too Enchanted *getting closer*
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8016
Re: Query: Too Enchanted
Wow, thank you to Lunetta22, Jessicatudor, and CoachMT for your comments, your advice has been so great. Enjoy my revision. Dear Agent, Tirian is an enchanted toad with magical powers living in the forest kingdom of Garn, home of the Enchanted Ones. But when a vengeful enchantress turns Tirian into...