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by stardog911
November 29th, 2010, 1:54 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Favorite misheard song lyrics
Replies: 33
Views: 17236

Re: Favorite misheard song lyrics

It sounds like "sexy fish" at the end of David Guetta's "Sexy B1tch"
at least that's what I tell my kids ;)
by stardog911
May 30th, 2010, 12:33 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3915

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy

k lachrymal, reworked it. try this. Dear Agent, Seventeen-year-old Kat is haunted by dreams of people she's never met. Well, maybe "people" isn't the right word: a small boy with wings, psychotic goblins and a good looking elven prince who also happens to be an absolute jerk. Kat is certain none of ...
by stardog911
May 29th, 2010, 3:56 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun

Revision The cloaked figure moved through the twilight paths of Liberty Park, just another shadow, blending among the gloom of early evening. With little effort, he slipped unnoticed by the addicts and dealers skulking along the walks. Barong felt at ease here, no one ever noticed him, too absorbed ...
by stardog911
May 29th, 2010, 3:51 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3915

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy

tightened my query up as well as dropping just about 3k words from the novel!lol
by stardog911
April 26th, 2010, 4:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 24
Views: 3915

Re: Query "Blood of Ihdun' YA Urban Fantasy

How does this query sound instead? Dear Agent, Seventeen year old Kat is haunted by dreams of people she's never met. Well maybe "people" isn't the right word, a small boy with wings, psychotic goblins and a drop dead, gorgeous elven prince! BLOOD OF IHDUN is a Young Adult/Urban Fantasy. I feel you ...
by stardog911
April 15th, 2010, 1:31 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun

Thanks for the feedback Lee. I'll go back through, keeping your suggestions in mind. Will re-post in a few days. BTW my husband is gonna love your post!
;D
by stardog911
April 14th, 2010, 1:46 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: How old are you?
Replies: 113
Views: 22529

Re: How old are you?

lol just found this thread! What a perfect way to end the night! :D I'm 37,just started truly writing last feb although I just found a modern day Romeo and Juliet script that I wrote in High School.I got an A so I thought why not read it.It was truly horrible! lmbo! I'm so glad my current novel is n...
by stardog911
April 13th, 2010, 11:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Guidelines for Posting Queries
Replies: 39
Views: 57674

Re: Guidelines for Posting Queries or Excerpts From Your Work

sorry Quil!I never thought that it might be annoying for the original query to disappear. :(
I was just trying to save space. Henceforth I will post revised query below in the thread.
by stardog911
April 12th, 2010, 9:52 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: VALENTINE, New Revision & stuff
Replies: 33
Views: 5240

Re: Query: VALENTINE

P.S.please feel free to shred my own query! :)
by stardog911
April 12th, 2010, 9:51 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: VALENTINE, New Revision & stuff
Replies: 33
Views: 5240

Re: Query: VALENTINE

rainbow, if the sister is a major player in the book, maybe up the stakes as to her part. eg. Nineteen year-old Adam owes his sister. Big time. The five year-old saved his life when she found him lying in a pool of blood after he tried to commit suicide. He swore he'd make it up to her! Something li...
by stardog911
April 12th, 2010, 9:35 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: New Manuscript - What do you think of this style?
Replies: 14
Views: 2730

Re: New Manuscript - What do you think of this style?

Blanche, not all 14 and 15 year olds are such. my 14 year old son is actually quite innocent. I suppose we have tried to keep him rather protected from some of the harsher realities of the world.(he believed that you couldn't have children unless you were married until my daycare girl informed him o...
by stardog911
April 11th, 2010, 3:25 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Music or quiet when you write?
Replies: 64
Views: 16744

Re: Music or quiet when you write?

I have six children who can be very distracting. :) I put the ear-buds in and crank it up until I can't hear any "outside" noise. Although it can't be music that I like to sing along to or I get distracted as well. It has to be fast and up beat as well or I just drift off. I couldn't do like Nathan ...
by stardog911
April 10th, 2010, 8:58 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: New Manuscript - What do you think of this style?
Replies: 14
Views: 2730

Re: New Manuscript - What do you think of this style?

Hi Blanche, I'm not a pro or anything, my novel hasn't published yet, but I have read a lot. :) The premise sounds good but I found the story rather confusing. You need more details, it seemed rather rushed and there are a few grammar mistakes. (nothing stops the flow of a story for me like grammar ...
by stardog911
April 10th, 2010, 8:45 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue Blood of Idhun
Replies: 9
Views: 1704

Re: Prologue Blood of Idhun

hopefully final edit of my prologue. let me know how it feels.
by stardog911
April 10th, 2010, 8:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG Novel Query
Replies: 14
Views: 2394

Re: MG Novel Query

The revised query sounds good to me, I have a nine year old and I think she'll like it. :)
maybe instead of tea you could put in time to do her homework or some such thing.
keep up the good work!