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by NicoleLee
February 13th, 2010, 4:13 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Please Help
Replies: 8
Views: 1673

Re: Query - Please Help - Revised 3

Mr. Agent, Nina, a nineteen-year-old college student on the brink of suicide, is desperate to change her life, but that means dumping her abusive control-freak boyfriend, being alone, and having to figure out who she is, what she wants, and what she’s willing to sacrifice to get there. With the help...
by NicoleLee
February 13th, 2010, 2:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fiction Query: No *good* title yet.
Replies: 3
Views: 964

Re: YA Fiction Query: No *good* title yet.

Sixteen year old Lily would rather goof off with her best friend Riley, while the rest of the girl world just seems interested in getting his attention. She doesn’t need a tan and lying on a beach is boring, thank you very much. Lily knows she has Riley’s friendship so that’s what she’s determined t...
by NicoleLee
February 13th, 2010, 2:34 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Please Help
Replies: 8
Views: 1673

Re: Query - Please Help - Revised 2

Mr. Agent, Nina, a nineteen year old college student on the brink of suicide, is desperate to change her life but that means dumping her abusive controlling boyfriend, being alone, and having to figure out who she is, what she wants, and what she’s willing to sacrifice to get there. With the help of...
by NicoleLee
February 12th, 2010, 5:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Replies: 8
Views: 1664

Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining

Dear [insert agent's name]: I am seeking representation for my 80,000 word fantasy young adult novel, THE LAND OF IMAGINING. I would move this to right before "Thank you..." Alexia thinks she’s just an ordinary girl with a lofty goal – to become a best-selling novelist. Comma But a magical pen and a...
by NicoleLee
February 12th, 2010, 5:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Dragon
Replies: 37
Views: 5511

Re: QUERY: THE LAST DRAGON

I personally really like your story. I think you need to add a few lines to let the agent know how many words, is this a series, name the genre, even if it's apparent. Why are you querying the specific agent you are querying? Overall I am intrigued to see the final product when you get published :) ...
by NicoleLee
February 12th, 2010, 4:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Please Help
Replies: 8
Views: 1673

Query - Please Help_Revised

Mr. Agent, Nina, a nineteen year old college student on the brink of suicide, is desperate to change her life but that means dumping her abusive controlling boyfriend and being alone. With the help of her therapist she dumps Caesar, but not without fear and repercussions. When Sebastian comes into h...
by NicoleLee
February 12th, 2010, 10:00 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Ready to be done with this! Query for VISIONS (YA)
Replies: 22
Views: 4633

Re: VISIONS (YA)

Dear Mr. Agent, A grieving seventeen-year-old must use her unwanted ability to see into the future, track down, and stop the serial killer who is terrorizing Princeton, NJ. (Why does she care about Princeton, NJ? I like the sentence but it needs one more element, her connection to Princeton, NJ.) De...
by NicoleLee
February 11th, 2010, 7:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query for 'Hard Rock'- Commercial Fiction
Replies: 11
Views: 2388

Re: Query for 'Hard Rock'- Commercial Fiction

Dear Ms. Agent: Smart-mouthed gumshoe, Guy Morgan doesn't work much; (Comma) but he does drink half his weight in whisky each day, (no comma) while exposing the occasional insurance fraud or matrimonial infidelity. (Too many comma's breaks the flow of the sentence) When Guy’s old (Delete the word "o...
by NicoleLee
February 11th, 2010, 7:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Please Help
Replies: 8
Views: 1673

Query - Please Help

Mr. Agent, Nina, on the brink of suicide, is desperate for a shred of hope. Sebastian, the pastor’s son of mega church One Hope vies to be that shred. However, Nina’s lack of belief causes a battle within the church walls. When Nina almost dies the two are brought closer together, but will it be eno...