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- June 10th, 2010, 12:04 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 453294
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
What would it take to get your librarian, in her natural surroundings, to yell at you...again? It wasn’t hard for Serena. In the compact library of Jenkintown, a suburb of Philadelphia, there was always some degree of mischief whenever that thirteen year old girl appeared. "Why? Why? Why?"...
- February 13th, 2010, 3:49 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Beweary of this Query
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2319
Re: Beweary of this Query
Thanks for the feedback. I'll get back to you on this.
- February 11th, 2010, 8:03 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Beweary of this Query
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2319
Beweary of this Query
Dear Nathan, An Amber Alert is placed for Serena Crazyhorse; an orphaned, stubborn, and defiant ‘tween-ager. Who satiated her wanderlust by reading the notoriously banned book, Spaceschool.com. Everyone who reads it disappears, Serena included. But where do they go? Bad timing though, this Book itse...
- February 11th, 2010, 7:34 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: Penumbra (1 Revision)
- Replies: 10
- Views: 4640
Re: QUERY: Penumbra
Ben, I thought the premise was entertaining especially since there was a moral dilemma involved with sins of the father. However, the thing that I was wondering that you might want to look at was the demon exorcising part. The lyrical flavor was lost in translation for me somehow. There didn't seem ...
- February 11th, 2010, 7:25 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3988
Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Dear Nicole, I just had the privalege of going to a query workshop with Query Shark and learned that all you need to say at the end of a query is Thank you for your consideration. And then your name. Very impressive premise! I was fighting with a similar one when I decided to table it because the bo...