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by BasilZyllion
June 10th, 2010, 12:04 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 282877

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

What would it take to get your librarian, in her natural surroundings, to yell at you...again? It wasn’t hard for Serena. In the compact library of Jenkintown, a suburb of Philadelphia, there was always some degree of mischief whenever that thirteen year old girl appeared. "Why? Why? Why?" asked the...
by BasilZyllion
February 13th, 2010, 3:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Beweary of this Query
Replies: 3
Views: 1017

Re: Beweary of this Query

Thanks for the feedback. I'll get back to you on this.
by BasilZyllion
February 11th, 2010, 8:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Beweary of this Query
Replies: 3
Views: 1017

Beweary of this Query

Dear Nathan, An Amber Alert is placed for Serena Crazyhorse; an orphaned, stubborn, and defiant ‘tween-ager. Who satiated her wanderlust by reading the notoriously banned book, Spaceschool.com. Everyone who reads it disappears, Serena included. But where do they go? Bad timing though, this Book itse...
by BasilZyllion
February 11th, 2010, 7:34 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: Penumbra (1 Revision)
Replies: 10
Views: 2142

Re: QUERY: Penumbra

Ben, I thought the premise was entertaining especially since there was a moral dilemma involved with sins of the father. However, the thing that I was wondering that you might want to look at was the demon exorcising part. The lyrical flavor was lost in translation for me somehow. There didn't seem ...
by BasilZyllion
February 11th, 2010, 7:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: The Land of Imagining
Replies: 8
Views: 1664

Re: QUERY: The Land of Imagining

Dear Nicole, I just had the privalege of going to a query workshop with Query Shark and learned that all you need to say at the end of a query is Thank you for your consideration. And then your name. Very impressive premise! I was fighting with a similar one when I decided to table it because the bo...