Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Thank you, Beth. I'm glad to reach even as many people as I have thus far, and glad to have reached them in the way that I seem to have. I suppose I might as well mention, since I forgot to this morning, that the encouragement I've received thus far has swayed me to keep the intro and outro. I hones...

Premise... I like to think of it as a jumping-off point. For me, it's a phrase or idea that inspires what I'm about to do; it's not a lodestone to guide me to the end, just something that will get me to the store where I can buy the right map. BROKEN MIRROR was inspired by the random thought "W...

Ghost and Lee, Thanks for the feedback. I broke my word to myself and picked these up last night to work on. I think I've gotten the timing fixed up the way I want in the intro, or at least a lot closer than it was. We'll see next week when I give the whole thing its umpteenth read. As to the conclu...

Thanks, folks. It's encouraging. I like the term "grounding," by the way. One of my testers is reading a version without these pieces and his primary complaint was what he called "perspective shock." If I may quote him directly: At first, I expected that there was going to be mor...

Alright, so I'm really, really on the fence on these pieces...or perhaps I'm not so much on the fence as I'm practically standing in the yard. I'm going to post them here and I'd like to know what you think of them. I'm not necessarily looking for a lot of heavy editing as much as I'm looking to see...

I've uploaded the first piece of the new story, "The Professional," this morning. With any luck, I'll be better able to post all the parts in something like a timely fashion this time.

Link is in my .sig

Trw78, Thanks. Things are better. Or as better as they're likely to be which is, frankly, good enough. I've got the full text going out tonight to a couple of people, intro and outro included. I may very well post them here as well next week. I want to sit on them a little longer and see if I'm stil...

I don't remember if this was a beginning passage but it would help to clarify things for the reader, if this is the case. When you are first reading a book, you take everything at face value, unless a review or a blurb specifies otherwise. I know this is supposed to be "literary" fiction,...

If I may insert my own observations? In the first sentence of the second paragraph, I don't like the verb awoke. I would stick with just 'woke'; considering the casual nature of the rest of the text, awoke feels out of place. And, bang, right off the bat, we come to the major observation: there are ...

I finally posted the end of the story about "Earnest Ben". I had it done more than a month ago, when my free time was nearly unlimited, but that came to a screeching halt. So it took time to be able to find room in the day for both "Ben" and BROKEN MIRROR. Today, I found the room...

So I came home from work last night and took the dog out in the rain. So this is the scene as I saw it: Dave stood out in the rain, waiting for the dog to take care of his business. Hunger knocked in his stomach, rain knocked on the umbrella. Bright light from the garage lit the scene with faded whi...

Ghost, No single ideology is being drawn on. The ideas are probably between 5 and 10 thousand years old, more or less. In some cases they are older, in some they're probably younger. They crop up in Egypt, Siberia, the South Pacific, North America, etc. Much of the work is also based on "archai...

Curious. How would you re-punctuate mine? I've actually cut my dashes way down in the story, but these pesky ones have remained. Mind if I add mine own rendition? The original: Gatoweh —Autumn—1779 by the whiteman’s calendar—midday by the sun’s position, but twilight for the Iroquois people, dusk f...

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The story isn't actually going anywhere. It was a quickly thrown together post for April Fool's Day. If I'd have thought of it sooner, I could have polished out the hostility without losing the riff on mainstream. Don't get me wrong, I don't hate mainstream books. BOB knows I've read my share, and I...