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Here is my working query... __________________________________ Dear [Agent Name]: Seventeen-year-old Nadine refuses to marry arrogant, ruthless Prince Kellan, even though the marriage is the Queen's dying command. On the eve of the grand wedding, she flees this obligation—and runs headlong into anot...

NEWEST QUERY: Nadine, a sheltered and ordinary seventeen-year-old, finds herself engaged to her arrogant foe the Prince of Embero when she attends the Embers Ball. With nothing to lose, except her head, Nadine flees on the back of a winged horse. While on the run, she is summoned by magical forces....

Here is my query... NOTE: NEWEST QUERY AT THE END! ____________________ Dear [Agent Name], Nadine’s sheltered and ordinary life changes when a letter from the king arrives requesting that she be present at the Embers Ball. Unaware of his motive, Nadine reluctantly attends, only to find herself engag...

For generations the Griffin Lords of Galenburg have guarded a secret. For generations they have dreaded the world discovering it. When unthinkable happens and their sinister patron reminds them of their debt, they are forced to turn to their one time street rat and now most disreputable of lieutena...

REVISION #1 My sister remarked to me that after so many versions, the query must feel like word hash. Yes. Yes, it does. Is this version any better? (Just for those of you who wondered. Life in the cities was very different from life on the farm in 1938. In the city there was electricity and teleph...

NEWEST QUERY LETTER ________________________ Dear [Agent Name], When free-thinker Belle is informed at the Embers Ball that she’s affianced to the egotistical Prince of Embero; she is simply appalled. On the eve of the grand wedding, she flees, and a reward without parallel is issued for her head. ...

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Dear [Agent Name], When lovely free-thinker Belle is informed at the Embers Ball that she is now affianced to the egotistical Prince of Embero, she’s simply appalled. And on the eve of the grand wedding, she flees, and a reward without parallel is issued for her head. Belle, like her mother, has th...

The advise on this forum are great. I'd like to thank you in advance for your help. If you need me to return the favor, please just ask, and I'll be happy to help you. ____________________ NOTE: NEWEST QUERY AT THE END ____________________ Dear [Agent Name], When lovely free-thinker Belle is informe...

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LATEST QUERY _____________________ Most girls dream of becoming a princess, but Nadine is far from the typical seventeen-year-old maiden. When King Joseph announces at the annual Embers Ball that she must marry his son Kellan, the ruthless and arrogant Prince of Embero, Nadine decides to choose her...

Query _________________ Most girls dream of becoming a princess, but seventeen-year-old Nadine is not like most girls. When King Joseph announces at the annual Embers Ball that she has been chosen to marry his son Kellan, the ruthless and arrogant Prince of Embero, to satisfy his queen’s dying wish...

query _________________ Most girls dream of becoming a princess, but seventeen-year-old Nadine is not like most girls. When King Joseph announces at the annual Embers Ball that she has been chosen to marry his son Kellan, the ruthless and arrogant Prince of Embero, to satisfy his queen’s dying wish...

Query _________________ Most girls dream of becoming a princess, but seventeen-year-old Nadine is not most girls. When King Joseph announces at the annual Embers Ball that she has been chosen to marry his son Kellan, the ruthless and arrogant Prince of Embero, she does the one thing only she has da...