Nathan Bransford - The Forums

The latest attempt, also in the opening post under REVISION. Unable to reproduce, mankind is driven to near extinction over the course of a generation. The small population that remains tries to rebuild, but after a century their efforts are complicated when strays, a population hiding in the southe...

OK, this doesn't seem like a query letter. It's like reading a story. Like you just took a few paragraphs from the novel and threw them together. Try describing the world of the story a little bit (your third paragraph might be a better lead paragraph), then describe the characters and what the sta...

The submission was ten pages long. I had already printed it and placed it into a manilla folder, and had even addressed it to her. Part of the reason I sent the e-mail was to feel her out. All I wanted was an enthusiastic response. How difficult is it to say yes for a change? I had even explained t...

Second try, some explanatory info after the initial query. ---------------- Warren Pierce will do anything, and has, to find his daughter Katey. The strays, disfigured and dangerous after two centuries of inbreeding, have her. They took her and left he and his wife tied in separate rooms of their bu...

First, to all of you, thank you. It is true that James is the lead character in a story within a story which makes up nearly one third of the book. I'll give it another go without him.

Hello fine ladies and gentleman of the forum. It is my first post, and I hope no offense is taken that it's a query posted for critique. I will gladly go through and offer whatever advice that I can to those I feel I can help while I'm here, but at the moment I feel I play the role of novice rather ...