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by mirror-egami
February 4th, 2010, 2:04 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x
Replies: 11
Views: 2350

Re: Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x

The latest attempt, also in the opening post under REVISION. Unable to reproduce, mankind is driven to near extinction over the course of a generation. The small population that remains tries to rebuild, but after a century their efforts are complicated when strays, a population hiding in the southe...
by mirror-egami
February 3rd, 2010, 11:24 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x
Replies: 11
Views: 2350

Re: Query Letter Critique

OK, this doesn't seem like a query letter. It's like reading a story. Like you just took a few paragraphs from the novel and threw them together. Try describing the world of the story a little bit (your third paragraph might be a better lead paragraph), then describe the characters and what the sta...
by mirror-egami
February 3rd, 2010, 6:09 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: The literary agent is also a practicing author - say what?
Replies: 63
Views: 10001

Re: The literary agent is also a practicing author - say what?

The submission was ten pages long. I had already printed it and placed it into a manilla folder, and had even addressed it to her. Part of the reason I sent the e-mail was to feel her out. All I wanted was an enthusiastic response. How difficult is it to say yes for a change? I had even explained t...
by mirror-egami
February 3rd, 2010, 11:25 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x
Replies: 11
Views: 2350

Re: Query Letter Critique

Second try, some explanatory info after the initial query. ---------------- Warren Pierce will do anything, and has, to find his daughter Katey. The strays, disfigured and dangerous after two centuries of inbreeding, have her. They took her and left he and his wife tied in separate rooms of their bu...
by mirror-egami
February 3rd, 2010, 10:50 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x
Replies: 11
Views: 2350

Re: Query Letter Critique

First, to all of you, thank you. It is true that James is the lead character in a story within a story which makes up nearly one third of the book. I'll give it another go without him.
by mirror-egami
February 3rd, 2010, 1:32 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x
Replies: 11
Views: 2350

Query Letter Critique - Revised 2x

Hello fine ladies and gentleman of the forum. It is my first post, and I hope no offense is taken that it's a query posted for critique. I will gladly go through and offer whatever advice that I can to those I feel I can help while I'm here, but at the moment I feel I play the role of novice rather ...