Nathan Bransford - The Forums

TAKE 3! Woo! Closer every time. To comment on comments above: With my premise, it's hard not to repeat the words "nightmare" and dream. Any suggestions for mixing it up are appreciated. As far as it being a little anemic, I'm trying not to introduce too many of the other characters subplot...

Thank you all for your advice! I tried rewording it a little, and making sure the focus is on my protagonist, Gabe. Gabriel Aisling’s little sister suffers from night terrors, a disorder afflicting children that causes intense nightmares. But when they put her in a coma, Gabe is forced to use his ow...

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His father only grunted in reply.

Ditch that bit. I'm jealous. This is really tight writing. Give us something that NEEDS critiquing.

Thanks in advance for any advice offered. All constructive compliments welcome. I'll take extra effort to critique the works of people who help me out (where I can, of course. I wouldn't even know where to begin helping someone write historical fiction, for example) Also, I'd love comments on my que...

Many thanks to all the people who've already taken the time to give me feedback. Here's the latest incarnation of my first page (roughly). The first sentence is still giving me fits, but it's the best I've been able to come up with so far. What do you think (about the first sentence and/or the rest...

ANOTHER EDIT! You all have been wonderfully helpful. The newest version is at the bottom of the page. Closer every time! EDIT: Take 2 is at the bottom of the page. Thanks again for advice. And yes, I realize that the timing for a dream adventure is questionable (inception/Awake, etc). But I started ...

Let me begin by saying: I would read this. The first thing I see is that you establish a very interesting world in your query. But I'm not sure what the primary conflict of the story is, if there is one. Is it the kidnapped people? or her kids disappearing? or her devil mother in law? I don't fault ...

I hate this question. I've been struggling for some time to finish a novel, so my response is usually "Well, it's coming along. I'm just working on some revisions right now", and allow that period of revisions to last indefinitely

It can be very intimidating.

Ah... would that I could get the same humorous, yet compelling style of Joss Whedon manages with his television shows

I offer my thanks to Nathan Bransford for his insight into the publishing industry and creating a vicious, cutthroat competition to throw in our two cents. I’d like to share my own thoughts on gender in fiction and even fiction AS a gender. With as few credible citations http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki...