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- January 6th, 2015, 1:33 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query critique for THE FINAL CLUE
- Replies: 2
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Very stylish and sharp beginning. A few comments for consideration: (1) Gina’s not about to let anyone get away with threatening her life and she’s not about to allow some agent with dimples that can captivate any woman, into her life. This sentence seems too long and loses its punch. Consider break...