Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Hi Amanda, Synopses are miserable, there's no way around it. They can be effective, but cramming your whole story into a single page is ridiculously hard at best. That said, I think the best queries manage to outline the story so that the pieces make sense despite the multitude of omissions. In that...

Hi Wilderness. Your story sounds like it has a lot of interesting layers, probably with great thanks to your background in history. I think the prior comments pointing to Query Shark are great suggestions, as was the redline. Your current query tells us about the story from a distance (i.e. it is a ...

Hi Amanda, I think your query highlights the key conflicts in your story well, but with a little tightening, the writing could draw me into the action more rapidly. In the second line "Three years later, she is still haunted by the memories of her mysterious savior, but is unable to mention the...

Title: Poison Apples Genre: YA MR First 246 words: You can’t kill someone at a bake sale; death and dessert don’t mix. But as the too-blonde curls and too-tight shirt leaned closer to my boyfriend – ex-boyfriend- than cupcake sales required, the prohibition crumbled. With every giggle, Josie Connor ...